Conflicted

Conflicted

A Poem by Kayleen
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Hug
Drug
Shrug
Love
Lie
Cry
Truth
Deny
Deceive
Believe
My heart
On sleeve
Accept?
Reject
Hopeless
Desire
On fire
Perfect?
Reject
I love
U shove
Denial
Exile
Unwanted
Persuaded
To leave me
Lost; faded.
Commit to
True feeling
Misguided
Left reeling..

© 2013 Kayleen



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Kayleen
Experimental style. Please please if u took the time to read it, leave a review. It will only take a few more seconds :)

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Minimalist in design yet speaks to the chaotic mind we all have at least at one point in our lives and often never rid ourselves of. Reminds me of many things in my past especially my high school years (a dark time for me but isn't that everyone in some way?).

I like it - reminds me of some of my works and my more angst ridden pieces.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very good flow of words. The poem made sense using the minimum amount of words. Conflict and find right place to be. A hard journey for all. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


This was a little bit different style, but I like it. I think one word lines pack a punch, because they just get right down to the meaning and raw emotion. Enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing. Keep writing!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it when authors experiment. Just with these one liners, I can really feel the poem. I like how one line affects the other, as an reaction from the pervious line. Such a good concept.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Minimalist in design yet speaks to the chaotic mind we all have at least at one point in our lives and often never rid ourselves of. Reminds me of many things in my past especially my high school years (a dark time for me but isn't that everyone in some way?).

I like it - reminds me of some of my works and my more angst ridden pieces.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The entire cycle starting from acceptance to denial and ending with the feeling of loss has been beautifully portrayed. Well drafted with precision and clarity. Great read.
I probably have have written more words in the review than your poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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It's okay, I guess. Two things that irked me were the use of 'u' instead of you, and the use of a semi-colon when I think a comma would have worked just fine. Interesting style. I think you used this before? Not sure. I think your previous experiment was better. This one lacks meaning to me.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I liked the other one, Plaything, better, but I enjoyed this one too. Love the style!

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Jen
I enjoyed the fact that the style really enhanced that feeling of being conflicted - of jumping between different decisions in the blink of an eye. Good write, for sure!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is great... I enjoyed this concept, whether intentional on your part or not. I've read this four or five times through, sometime two lines at a time, sometimes three, sometimes four, and every read has an almost different meaning altogether. I might have to try something like this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

those one word lines are really powerful here and this poem flows pretty well :)
i really like all the feeling here. great!

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Tags: relationships, lies, hurt, confusion, sex, betrayal, insecurity, deception, mistakes, conflict, experimental, stylized, mew, word assosciation, wordplay, emotions, pain

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Kayleen
Kayleen

Anaheim, CA



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Kayleen. 22. California. I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions.. more..

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