Reach Out And Grab It.

Reach Out And Grab It.

A Poem by Kayleen
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Technicolor 
Nightmare 
Play dates 
Underwear 

Sunset 
Boulevard 
Club drugs
Fancy cars

Shopping spree
Vegas Strip 
SoHo 
Party kIds 

Live fast 
Die Rich 
Ride slow 
Hot b***h 

Cocaine
Shot gun 
Private planes 
Make me come 

Over there 
Dance team 
Make it rain 
Dolla greens 

Bacardi shots
Pants off 
Motel 
Jello shots
 
Lou Boutins 
Cartieŕ 
Hollywood 
Highway 

Back page 
Debutaunt 
Everything 
That you want.

© 2015 Kayleen


Author's Note

Kayleen
Please review if you read it please thank you :)

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The first thing that came to mind was 'we didn't start the fire'. I thought it was very clever. Although it is conveying a hedonistic lifestyle, reading between the lines it seems like the person is questioning whether it is what they want or whether they are doing this because it should be what they want. It would be good at the end to have a verse that suggests that next time it all begins again.

If you get a chance could you please review for me? Cheers

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kayleen

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your review. You really got the gist of this poem I'm glad to see that feeling.. read more



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i read this and found it as a checklist to the dirty extravagance of as stated the strip

this is nostalgic if read as i had from the point of fetish wild eyes
so with that
great piece

Posted 3 Years Ago


I saw you asking for reviews that you would then review back. I'm doing short stories now, but I have taken poetry classes in the past.

So I like this. I like the images. I think one thing that might make it even stronger is if you had an organizing vision for each stanza. By this I mean that the first line or the last line of each stanza is connected somehow.

I suspected you were doing this with the stanza
Cocaine
Shot gun
Private planes
Make me come

As cocaine, shot guns, and private planes are exciting, but I'm not sure because shot guns sound scary.

So as it is, I see many interesting images, but I want you to help me see how they are connected in a special way and not just a random assortment of cool words that relate to LA.

I tend not to think in terms of number scores. I hope that's ok.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Honestly just feels like a list of words.

Posted 6 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It has a nice flow and definitely makes a point. I don't like it but that's because it's not my style- quite honestly I think there are a few people out there that would find it perfect. My thought is that it seems something that is more suited as a rap song (with more words, or course) than a conventional poem, though I suppose that it also appeals to me because of that. Anyways, the point of me saying that is to say that you should try writing song lyrics lol. 95/100, because it wasn't my style but it was good.

Posted 6 Years Ago


The first thing that came to mind was 'we didn't start the fire'. I thought it was very clever. Although it is conveying a hedonistic lifestyle, reading between the lines it seems like the person is questioning whether it is what they want or whether they are doing this because it should be what they want. It would be good at the end to have a verse that suggests that next time it all begins again.

If you get a chance could you please review for me? Cheers

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kayleen

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your review. You really got the gist of this poem I'm glad to see that feeling.. read more
This was great! Your poem is simple with one word sentence but transitions into this neon, wild glimpse into someone’s life. The only way I can further describe it, it's like snapchat story :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ooh, I like this. Reads like a game of hedonistic word-association. The rhyme at the end works really well, almost capping off the piece.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the format of this! It really grabbed my attention. I feel this piece is also so current in the society we live in and I think you have captured it expectionally.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow, what a unique poem! That doesn't mean that I didn't like it by the way, hell I loved it!!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You do a lot with very few words, and paint a clear picture. It's this whirlwind snapshot and everything is nice and vivid.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 30, 2015
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Tags: lost, hollywood, celebrity, aspirations, confused, confusion, sunset, vain, vainity, abuse, use, drugs, party, apathy

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Kayleen
Kayleen

Anaheim, CA



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Kayleen. 22. California. I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions.. more..

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