Sometimes

Sometimes

A Poem by Kayleen

When the fear gets the best of me

When the hate steals whats left of me

When silence is the enemy 

I refuse to make a sound.


Sometimes.


When I cant stand to look at you

When all i want is pain for you

after everything you put me through

I look at you and smile


Sometimes.


When I let you near me 

When you think you know me

I find I speak sincerely

To give credit to a lie


Sometimes...


© 2010 Kayleen



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Kayleen
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This shows the best and worst side of human nature. The survival instinct where we will do anything to just keep moving forward, and the side of us that picks up the pieces and soldiers on. This is moving on so many different depths. I can envision this unreciprocated love you're describing and it makes me feel a connection with the girl. Your poems, whether I consider them good or bad, have managed to make me do this. You are a truly powerful writer, even in your weak moments.
It also shows the true nature of the human heart, that no matter what we always remember that love of ours. They can hurt us to where we feel like hiding ourselves in some corner of the world, but the memories and the feelings always remain. Well done, bravo!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This shows the best and worst side of human nature. The survival instinct where we will do anything to just keep moving forward, and the side of us that picks up the pieces and soldiers on. This is moving on so many different depths. I can envision this unreciprocated love you're describing and it makes me feel a connection with the girl. Your poems, whether I consider them good or bad, have managed to make me do this. You are a truly powerful writer, even in your weak moments.
It also shows the true nature of the human heart, that no matter what we always remember that love of ours. They can hurt us to where we feel like hiding ourselves in some corner of the world, but the memories and the feelings always remain. Well done, bravo!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sometimes. Not every time, But every once in a while, you give in, take a sec, but sometimes. Enjoyed the flow, the feeling, and especially the ambiguity. Some poems work better when the reader gets to fill in the details. This is one of those.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Another great poem. I'm never surprised to see so many reviewing your work. Your worth the read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is good I wouldnt bother to review it if it wasnt But i like the flow of it I like even more that it says something intelligable

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I understand the fear and the silence....excellent write...I can relate so well :)
Peace
Robin

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sometimes me and my mother would argue over the evil things my little brother did and i would sit there and listen to her yell at me before i rushed to the restroom to cry while writing a hateful poem. this poem right here brought back so many tearful memories, but it was still good because it touched my heart.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem. Loved the words chose, and flow.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

insightful expression to your perceptions
i like the flow to it
i enjoyed that it wasn't definite
with the sometimes
it shows an inner balancing of emotions

Posted 7 Years Ago


Short and sweet. Very nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

woah...this would be a great song :) plus i like how i can feel the presence of your poem as well. Nice work :)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Kayleen
Kayleen

Anaheim, CA



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Kayleen. 22. California. I Like Old School Punk Rock, Electro nonsense, and Katy Perry. The Mighty f*****g Boosh. Everything else amazing overseas we dont have here. I make movies, bad decisions.. more..

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