Why Have I Fallen For You?

Why Have I Fallen For You?

A Poem by Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)





































There are so many, yet so few,
Some who we know, and some so new,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Heart goes weak, when saying your name,
For I have changed and, I'm not the same,
Love is magical and not some silly game,
But, why have I fallen for you?

 

Even with my eyes closed I can find you in a crowd,

Hold your hands and say "I LOVE YOU" so loud,

To call you my love I really feel proud,

But, Why have I fallen for you?


I am still within the love spell you’ve cast,
My love for you is so deep and vast,
This love of mine is true and will always last,
But, why have I fallen for you?

Of all others you're precious and fully mine,
With you near me, my life will always be fine,
Our love is one, truly pure and divine,
But, why have I fallen for you?


You play with me in showers of rain,
Comfort me when in sorrow and pain,
With your help my efforts will never go in vain,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.













6th

May 18, 2010



2nd runner up

Jun 6, 2010



Little Girls Are Made of Award

Aug 18, 2010




© 2010 Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)


Author's Note

Shalini Dinesh (Poet's World)
The poetry was written for Zejel contest where,

The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All the other stanzas - as many of them as you like - have 4 lines, rhyming bbba, the a rhyme harking back to the first stanza. The overall rhyming scheme for the poem is aaa/bbba/ccca/ddda etc.


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I really liked this, especially the repetition of "Why have I fallen for you"
Can I make one suggestion, just my opinion, but, if you wrote it like this 'Why have I fallen for YOU?" it makes the point even clearer, like out of all the thousands, why did I pick YOU. I donno, just what I thought.
A really great poem, the rhymes were good, and the flow was perfect.
I only had trouble with the 3rd stanza where I felt like the rhyme was really pushed. maybe re write it or tweak it a bit.
but really good write overall.
keep it up!


Posted 13 Years Ago


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Good Question. I wonder if other people would have a different answer to this question. I, for one, don't even know how to answer this. I specifically like how you added "maybe" to the last line. It just shows that there's no exact answer and that it may change from time to time. Brilliant and very touching poem. Also, it contains a whole deal of innocence.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow, I enjoyed reading this a LOT! Very eloquent and lyrical; two things that matter a lot for a poem on love. What's funny is the fact I felt like singing it. Moreover I can relate to it. It has the true essence of the feeling of love. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


You always surprise the living life out of me with this amazing poems.. how come you have the ability to touched me even when I feel like.. blah blah blah
I find in your words.. always a place to relax and feel so loved. even if this piece is not for me.. I find it.. so passionate and desirable...Aw
You hot thing... lol.. ahahahaha
yes u are... dazzling

My fav. lines are !

Of all others you're precious and fully mine,
With you near me, my life will always be fine,
Our love is one, truly pure and divine,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You play with me in showers of rain,
Comfort me when in sorrow and pain,
With your help my efforts will never go in vain,
But, why have I fallen for you?

You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.
Gracias

Posted 13 Years Ago


Are you a fan of nevershoutnever or pop music? this would fit in very well with that. Very mainstream and pretty. Job well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Ah! This was beautiful..I loved the rhyme as well as the uniformly maintained structure of this piece a lot.
The way with which you have cleverly used the work "You" is really amazing.
A great write indeed!

Posted 13 Years Ago


You were true, and always so good,
The whole of who is me,you've best understood,
You cared and shared all that you could,
Maybe, that’s why I have fallen for you.

I like the last stanza most. Superb write!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This can make one great song. Just in need of some good music. :)
Very sweet !! x

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like that every stanza is connected to the first, bringing it all together not only in thought, but structure as well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well Done Poet Well Done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


You really do make the sweetest love poems. I liked the fact that you shower the person of interest with compliments, yet doubt why you fell for her at the same time. It's contradicting yet adds to the interest factor of the piece. The way you did the rhymes was genius. One grammar error I found though, was in the second line of the last stanza when you said "the whole of who is me,you've best understood" I think instead of who is me, you should write who I am. I think that's the right one. Or maybe you did it on purpose, I'm not sure; but that's just my opinion. Overall the poem was great. Sweet and simple.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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