Roses

Roses
Given on occasions
Laid on graves
Given to those we hold dear
the most important thing to remember
is the meaning of roses
because roses mean remember
We give roses to the sick
So they remember
that we care for them
We give roses to those we love
so they remember the special occasion
on which we give them
and we leave roses on graves
In the hope that those we love will remember us
And so that we remember them
I've never given a rose
or received one
But i know when i do
I will remember
Because roses mean remember

Reviews

[xx]

A touching poem, wonderfully written - just remember to be consistent in your capitalization - some of your "I"s are capitalized, but some aren't, for example.

You make good use of repetition, emphasizing the words "remember," "rose" - two very evocative words that your poem revolves around. The message you impart to your readers through this piece is easily understood; the flow of the poem itself is guides your readers along gently.

Just one minor thing - in the second line, you say roses are "given on occasions," but you might want to specify, or otherwise modify what you mean. "Occasions" has no connotation of its own; it's synonymous with "events," so you're saying, in essence, "Roses are given on events," which is a bit superfluous, perhaps?

You don't have to change it, of course - that's just my own opinion, and I speak only for myself. But keep writing! :)

-Mina

[Rose of Gondor]

This is a beautiful poem full of beautiful meaning. I like the imagery in your words. Great job, delicate, beautiful poem!

[Celestial Witch Child]

I love the underlying meaning, I'm just not sure how I feel about the repetitive nature of it all.

[SlightlyOdd]

thanks so much for reviewing

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

So pretty. I love it. I'll think of this next time I get a rose.

[jennifer little]

good work i liked it