ADRIFT

I AM FORSAKEN. where is God now?

Lost at sea. Boat at the bottom of the ocean. Now the only survivor. There's no hope for me. There's no light shining in my direction that will lead to my rescue. It's time to accept my fate... Unanswered prayers... Mom Dad thank you. Thank you for raising me. I had a good life. I wish I was able to take care of you in your older years. I'm so sorry... My best friends are gone. Drowned.Now, ghosts of the sea . And I am next to join them. I never been a religious person. I never had faith in something I never seen or never heard. If there is a God, has he forsaken me? Am I being punished for a lack of faith?...Unanswered prayers...Enough. My will is broken. My arms and legs are no longer capable of keeping me afloat. I succumb to the waves caring my listless body across the water. My mind wanders. Memories of the past and present. All the people I leave behind, how will they mourn me? Will my body ever be found? Will they ever know I tried everything to survive, but failed...Unanswered prayers... Tired. Time to let go.Close your eyes. Don't be afraid. This shouldn't take too long.I sink under the water.The water fills my helpless body. My eyes open...Light...

Author's Note

Inspired by a dream

Reviews

[marilyn 1225]

great ending!!
lovely writing

[Samuel Dickens]

Dreams, so I've found, are often extremely good inspirations/basis for a story. This one rings authentic in my mind, and is similar to thoughts I've had while serving in the Navy for twenty years.

[the Honest ghost]

I am very glad you were inspired to make such a beautiful piece

[Meaghan Rhymer]

"Now, ghosts of the sea . And I am next to join them" This is hauntingly beautiful and yet so relatable. What a feeling to be ethereal, floating...dying and yet fine with the idea of death. You make a great point here, I enjoyed this!

[EileenMarie]

I think we all have been here at some point in our lives. I know I have been! Maybe not on a boat but at a point when you don't know if you will survive.
Great write!

[Zeus]

There is something about this that really speaks to me. I feel like this captures an evasive aspect of the human condition, our helplessness. Thank you for sharing this!!!! Great work

[Dave]

I appreciate you sharing your feelings of despair. I couldn't help but to feel your desperation. It was easy to see how you might resign yourself to your inevitable fate. I think this was a very good write.

Take care - Dave

[Karen Redburn]

Your writing is very raw and genuine. More disturbing than most fictional horror stories I've read, if this is not a work of fiction, or is it? Are you interested in grammatical review?

[Amber Smith]

This grabbed at my soul. Thank you for sharing this.