Let Me Hold Your Heart

i wrote this thinking about the straight girl who i used to have a crush on. then i figured out that i'm not actually over her. it was inspired by my friend saying "i won't break it," referring to my other friend's guitar.

 

Please

let me hold your heart

for a moment.

Let me feel

its weight in my hand

its beautiful contours

as it settles seamlessly

into place.

I know

it will fit perfectly.

Let me feel

all the emotions

locked-up guilt

hidden joys

secret sorrows.

I swear

I won’t tell

a single soul.

 

You have my heart

wrapped around your finger

like a piece of string.

What on earth

do you need two hearts for?

 

I only want a moment.

Just one second

out of your life.

I only need a sample

and I will be able to move on.

I know I'm not a boy

but that doesn't have to make me

not worthy.

 

Please

let me hold your heart

for a moment.

I promise

I won’t break it.

Author's Note

i didn't really edit this poem a lot, so it's not polished or anything. any suggestions, constructive criticism, etc. would be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[Kevin Vorshak]

I think you did a nice job on the poem. I like the way you handled both sides of the conversations. To me, your writing is far more mature than many of those your age who post. You write from your heart and the emotion comes out. Thanks for sharing.

[Save the Trees, Save th..]

wow that is really good i love your writing style

[RamenPunk]

Hahaha I love U sis ! Ur so Deep! !

[bellastella]

I would say just for symmetry's sake (since that is what most people identify as beauty theoretically, in people anyways) to make the stanzas slightly more equal... as in break the first one up, but that isn't necessary. I really enjoy it though. Especially "I swear I won't tell a single soul." I really like that the character just wants the girl to give her a try, innocent and pure, no one would have to know. However, there is something vampire like about saying "I only need a taste and my thirst will be satiated."-random thought. Altogether, it is beautiful and honest.

[Satchmo's Gal]

I love it. It depicts a blind trust that every one wants to feel some time or another. Great job!