In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned

In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Composed in Villanelle form

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In His Eyes I Gazed ~ and Drowned...

'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,
like tingling waves caressing 'gainst my shore.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

So lost before, I wanted to be found;
to feel his touch within my very core;
'pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.

Whispers in the wind, swept me off the ground;
and when I looked down, no fear anymore;
in his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

Towards his melody; then I was bound.
Higher and higher I let my heart soar.
'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound,

Oh, what sweet dreams, just to have him around!
To fulfill those delights of moments before.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!

With his soft music, my heart he'll surround,
as there's no one more than him I adore!
'Pon a voice heard, I turned to merry sound.
In his eyes I gazed ~ and right away drowned!



© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



Author's Note

Dr. YumnaKay
~~ Another one of my learning experiences with Richard ~~ 😊

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Wow....is it permitted for me to cry? For this doth truly make me weep! It's gorgeous, Yumna. It's happy, emotional and so true. We've all felt these feeling at some point. Anyone who reads this and doesn't feel their heart heat is surely bereft of a soul.
I loved it! (I'm also a little jealous of your skill with words) ;) :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

Well, I didn't know someone could cry over this but probably allowable 😉
Thank you so muc.. read more



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Go you, and go Richard, cause this is awesome... The repeat rhymes and near rhymes... Just make this piece a pleasure to read... Good job, and nicely penned... Keep at the learning process, always best to write outside ones comfort zones...

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Ahh no I don't think so! You're already more than good 😊
Silente

7 Months Ago

Aha... I think we can all benefit from teachings, no matter the skill level... In some way, at least.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Well yeah that's a valid point.. 😊
You're welcome 😊😊
Such a profound beauty in your words...the title alone drew me in...and your poem never disappointed...excellent work.

:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you for the appreciation, Tots! Really means a lot to me 😊
T0TS

7 Months Ago

You are most welcome...it was my pleasure, Yumnakay.
A gloriously romantic Villanelle. The emotions are real and the imagery is splendid. Great work. lydi**

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this one 😊
What a wondrous poem, and what a beautiful form. I've never attempted a Villanelle, but how the words seem to flow from you so effortlessly! There is a music to this rhythm, and your song of adoration is pure joy. Brilliant! :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Ahh well it's really Richard who introduced me 😊😊
An owl on the moon

7 Months Ago

He seems a good friend and a good teacher too. 😊
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Yes he is and so are you 😇😇
I see so its "Villanelle" this time. A very nice flow as always Yumna. It's beautiful and it touched me deeply. Nicely done :) Keep writing your heart out

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Luna! I'm glad you liked this effort too! Means a lot to me 😊😊
Luna

7 Months Ago

Your welcome:)
What a wonderful piece! I liked your villanelle more than my own! Makes me reluctant to post the other one that I have lol. :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Hahah no! Just post it! I'm sure it's a good one 😊
Thank you so much for liking this effo.. read more
Kesha

7 Months Ago

Haha okay, possibly later :) And you are welcome!
Warm, beautiful Love. I adore this so much. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Anastasia! I'm glad you liked it 😊
I love this poem so much. its deep with a beautiful message. :)
Your writings are awlasy superb :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the appreciation! I'm glad you liked it 😊
So beautifully written! I truly enjoyed reading this from start to finish.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Paul! I'm glad you enjoyed this piece 😊
Expressing feelings beautifully following a particular pattern and standard is challenging. I appreciate how you excelled in bringing out those feelings so well.
Another fine piece of writing. Well done Yumnakay!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Bala! It is difficult indeed but I'm glad you found it okay 😊
Your app.. read more

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