I tried

I tried

A Poem by Akshat♥
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trying sometimes presents you a place where everything is just seems like a miracle:)

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I tried and tried and tried again
but its not working out
Its hard but I am trying..
giving everything I have..
still haven't found the right path..

I am trying to get close to it
but still far behind

Sometimes I get under it
grab it with my both arms
still far behind

It's getting worse the more I try

I am trying to sort it out
just the idea to do it remains laggard

One thought popped out from my mind
"I will try again tomorrow"

I try to push more
To give a last try

At last I succeeded 
feeling a big relief

Sometimes trying a lot
gives you a Success
its all the patience that counts at last











© 2016 Akshat♥


Author's Note

Akshat♥
Try to enjoy this poem..please review this honestly..
and rate it too..i will really appreciate it:)

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A simple poem with a painfully clear message.
I wonder if perhaps it's slightly repetitious...I understand that that feeds into the theme of trying again and again and again...I'd love to see you express this in a different form, more concise and limiting to see how you do; you're easily a good enough writer to do it. Maybe try taking the theme of the poem and putting it into the form of a haiku or a cinquain :)
But I reiterate, a nice poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Yes patience is hard at times when things aren't going our way, but we have to remember that everything has its appointed time.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patience is something some people lack and it tests relationships Thanks for writing this. It was a good read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love it. :) Thanks for sharing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love how all of your poems are lessons in life, teaching us new things everytime... thanks for sharing this!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love this too i can relate to it ! nice poem !:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Keep writting. I love

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like something I do every now and then. Good job! Teaches a lesson to all. Keep on writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It takes bravery to embark on such a journey,
but the reward is most certainly worth it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love it! :D i agree... never stop trying! i can feel the emotion in the poem ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A simple poem with a painfully clear message.
I wonder if perhaps it's slightly repetitious...I understand that that feeds into the theme of trying again and again and again...I'd love to see you express this in a different form, more concise and limiting to see how you do; you're easily a good enough writer to do it. Maybe try taking the theme of the poem and putting it into the form of a haiku or a cinquain :)
But I reiterate, a nice poem

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Akshat♥
Akshat♥

New Delhi, India



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