THROUGH THE DUSK

THROUGH THE DUSK

A Poem by Betty Hermelee
"

lost, dark, woodsy

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Through the dusk of crunchy leaves, crooked branches
at last a light, yet blurred to my eyes
I have trod a course for hours
circling full to fears of hinterland
alone, my pulse beats like a blender
at the trust this glow
I squint to view, receives me

I carry on, steps cautious
with my ancient
handmade stick
astute that prickly twigs
may snatch my eyelids
in the dark purple

As I footstep closer
I discern an old man
in a rocker with spectacles
I rap on the old wood door
the elder promptly greets me
with an inquisitive look
I'm lost, I say
He chuckles and invites me for tea
as I am thirsty from my hapless trek

© 2022 Betty Hermelee


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A wonderfully atmosic write. Excellent metaphor for so much of today.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much Ken, appreciate it.
Best
B.
PS I wii get to your work, not to.. read more
A wonderful trek through a threatening and lost land ending in finding comfort and welcome peace. A wonderful Allegory and metaphor for finding one's way in this life.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you Soren for stopping by and reviewing my poem.
Best, Betty
This is simply amazing Betty, I enjoyed this thriller

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much, appreciate it!
Best, Betty
This is one of those poems that makes me hope for a sequel. Intriguing poetry. Mystery wants to be solved leaving the reader wanting more. Why the trek? Who's the old man? What do you discuss over tea? Fun mysterious read.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thanks so much William, maybe a sequel?
Best
B.
Great story... such fun..With a nice wise ending..
Thank you for sharing..Betty
Lisa

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you Lisa, appreciate it
Best
Betty
The poetry. A beginning for a tale. I liked the wandering and finding a place to rest. You left a open ending. I wanted to know more. What did they talk about? Thank you dear Betty for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thank you John for a great review!
Best, B
Coyote Poetry

4 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Betty.
Oh deliciously dark and creepy
and the photo matches this piece
perfectly ...im liking this scary write
Well Done...

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thanks Fran for a lovely review; interesting that I never felt it was haunting….perhaps the settin.. read more
  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

you're s o welcome😊
I loved this, and the picture...eerie...
It would have felt creepy to find that cabin there, and the setting would have made me hesitant to approach.
But I would have...I like Scary.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thanks. Check J, really appreciate it.
Best, B
this reeled me in immediately. thanks for sharing!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Thanks for your review!
Best
Betty
The visuals of this piece are brilliant and the storytelling makes just that much better. I love how differently this one can be read, and how the story unfolds. ‘Crooked branches, at last a light’. This poem really does feel like hope, and it’s just beautifully written. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Betty Hermelee

4 Months Ago

Wow! Another great review from you, love it! Than you so much.

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Betty Hermelee
Betty Hermelee

Black Mountain, NC



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My love of poetry results from my love of art. As a painter I am able to express myself on a canvas. As a poet my words come from my heart, my moods, sometimes sad, mostly upbeat. I like to use vivid .. more..

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