Silence

Silence

A Poem by Laconic Meraki

Hello or Goodbye?
Silence mixed with echoes as the last tears falls.
Reminiscing on her greatest love of all .
Make up your mind.
Waiting.
The clock ticks -reminder that we are running out of time.

Nothing lasts forever. Nothing is the same.
Silence...no noise.
Ashes are all that remains .

Stay forever or leave for good.
You had a choice, ball was in your court.
No noise but silence is understood.
No response. No sound of your voice.

No more tears can I cry.
I no longer will ask you the reasons why.
Baby, goodbye.

© 2020 Laconic Meraki


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In my life experience, nothing good ever comes from discussing the end of a relationship with the person that's soon to be gone from one's life. Many think they are going for "closure" but all that happens is two people continue to argue about things they haven't been able to agree on for years. It's hard to take that silence & go, but that's what works best. Your poem feels like a mix between wanting to be brave & walk away boldly, yet also having those pesky regrets that lure the narrator back into it. The narrator seems to want to end it, but there's lots of second thoughts running between the lines that makes this feel realistic for how these things go (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


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I agree dear Laconic.
"Nothing lasts forever. Nothing is the same.
Silence...no noise.
Ashes are all that remains ."
The above lines. Real truth written. When we forget love. Only ashes of a dream is left. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


A very sad recounting of a laconic partner as they slip into the rear view mirror. Ons slight glitch :- "as the last tears fall.' rather than falls.

Posted 11 Months Ago


The emotions said and unsaid conveyed very well to me as a reader. With short, crisp verses, you articulated the pain of saying goodbye. Glad to have read this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laconic Meraki

11 Months Ago

I'm glad that you read it to. 😊
Thank you.
In my life experience, nothing good ever comes from discussing the end of a relationship with the person that's soon to be gone from one's life. Many think they are going for "closure" but all that happens is two people continue to argue about things they haven't been able to agree on for years. It's hard to take that silence & go, but that's what works best. Your poem feels like a mix between wanting to be brave & walk away boldly, yet also having those pesky regrets that lure the narrator back into it. The narrator seems to want to end it, but there's lots of second thoughts running between the lines that makes this feel realistic for how these things go (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



that's that then ... sad but it happens .. and it happens all the time .. now ya gotta take a deep breath and move on ... sshh.. and quietly .. fingers crossed maybe nobody will notice :)



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Breakups are painful. The silence hurts. The we now becomes the I. Sometimes the noise of an argument is better than deadly silence. Felt the sadness here.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some sounds are so large you never hear them... and others are so hurt-full, you never want to.

You notice how we don't always understand our tomorrows and how the yesterdays just don't fit? Life has this way of just happenin' and we ...we stare into our "nights".

Posted 1 Year Ago


Silence for me can be a welcome friend or a chalkboard scratch screech! The uneasy silence of unrequited love is a ponderous roar and one that has Even killed:( nice to meet you I am robert

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I love it! Silence speaks louder than words...move on girl and let your heart sing :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laconic Meraki

1 Year Ago

You really say ditto too?
Let's not only keep "hope" alive.
The use of the word "dit.. read more
X

1 Year Ago

Indeed, Indeed...it's a pleasure to meet you lovely poetess :)
Laconic Meraki

1 Year Ago

Lol. Ditto.
Silence is such a killer.
Mentally and emotionally.
There's pain here which could be mourning a passing or the death of a relationship.
Either way the words carry.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laconic Meraki

1 Year Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read. 💜
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

You're welcome, Christa.

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