Ten Thousand Holes

Ten Thousand Holes

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Do you sometimes wish you could throw back your shoulders and visit shadows where feelings are dull?

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Do you sometimes wish
you could throw back your shoulders
and visit shadows where feelings are dull?
Especially on those days
when you wonder if their grip could be loosened,
or if it would stay to meet voices,
weary of making soft turns
around bodies of favor.

Each of us claims to sense the withdrawal of what
we thought we knew as ripples
against valleys once held in our hours.
Yet, when the sound of the wind
wanders in to see,
we avoid eye contact with the truth.

Although, we journey through life ready to feel
the tides that change the shores
on which we move,
still we hold onto insincerity preached
right in front of us.
Is this because we lack the character
to look them in the eye?

Vibrations issue from your plans, precisely lighting
on your hopes and troubling
your breathing. Then, ten thousand holes
are left in your heart to mourn
what has been lost in shards of rumbling self-pity.

No, a composition cannot tiptoe around the sound
holding your heart as it breaks in two.
Yet, it can certainly open the door
so that you can hear what your spirit says.
I write these words
inside my heart in hopes you will copy them
in your own.
My wish for you is to mend
the same as me. 

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


Author's Note

Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist - Rafal Olbinski - http://www.tendreams.org/olbinski.htm

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Lovely work Neva. It does feel like a story or essay in its flow, but it has the heart of "Poem" all through it. I think it sad that we sometimes feel that poetry has to have a certain set of parameters in order to be considered "poetry." Your heart is so clearly marked on every line of verse here. Just lovely!

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A Stoem, my word for story/poem ... read like a story feel of a poem


Excellent as always

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Absolutely beautiful. It's sad how we can deny the truth sometimes, but it is sometimes so plain within us that we must see it. Lovely declaration of truth.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A exceptional depiction of a broken heart
along with a tormented soul...Great piece
Neva xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nicely done; such an affirmation of "self" that is makes me think almost you being a guru of sorts after reading this well written piece. I love the picture also...
...amazing stuff

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

When we are hurt a hole is created in our hearts that only aches when the wind blows. And you have made the wind stop. This was beautiful.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a superb insight(i would suggest this like that) on mending of the heart and yet having second thoughts about that lost love!
a superb poem!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW...THIS IMAGE IS AMAZING! AND THE WRITING IS SO POWERFUL...IT TAKES YOU PLACES. GREAT WROK!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow....i feel like you were taking me on a journey to choose btwn going back and feel the pain ana heartbreak or let it pass and mend what has been broken...Amazing composition.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can now truly understand why you pick the artwork you do, Neva. It matches the theme of this brilliant work oh so well. The unraveling is described so well here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on July 11, 2011
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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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