30 day Notice

My time on 12th and Centre in San Pedro. They shot the last scene of friday part two at my former home......I know so what!

30 Day Notice:

It stinks

the air wreaks of surrender

Large mounds of trash

lay still in the Alley

next to my Small green abode

Gang Graffiti faces my North

hopelessness faces my south

Rough black youths use my alley

as a throughway

and bathroom

strutting through with bad intentions

my neighbors stare at me

with owl like orbitals 

staring 

glaring

attempting to pierce 

my soul

and locate my secret

place

I stay in a one level, two roomed

green shack

owned by a former male figure skater

from Palos Verdes

he collects the rent, always during the day

My small home sits on the corner of 12th and Centre

police sirens mix with Mariachi Music

the two create a disco of the damned

This is my reality

but it suddenly becomes clear

my thirty day notice

will start

tomorrow

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

Truly a work of art. I like the gritty feel. Very cool.

[Aidz]

This is so kewl , thoroughly enjoyed it

[Tinasha LaRayé]

thoroughly enjoyed this piece. your imagery and depth really nailed the climate and set the scene for us to feel what you feel, in a way. the structure builds anxiety, the ending seals the sympathy. nicely done.

[Sunflower 20]

love the descriptions and the way you ended it with relation to the title, great job! :)

[Scandalous]

I don't really understand this one, I guess it is because I grew up middle class. But it is still a touching poem. Good job!

~ Scandalous

[Diane]

Lived that too often:( Great way with expressing how it feels.

[Dark Beauty]

Wonderful write!!

[M Garcia]

Excellent!

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solid raw descriptions give a vivid image into this world..and the ending is priceless!

[Muse]

You've come to terms with a bleak and scary fate.
police sirens mix with Mariachi Music
the two create a disco of the damned
This is my reality
It doesn't sound pleasant..........