30 day Notice

My time on 12th and Centre in San Pedro. They shot the last scene of friday part two at my former home......I know so what!

30 Day Notice:

It stinks

the air wreaks of surrender

Large mounds of trash

lay still in the Alley

next to my Small green abode

Gang Graffiti faces my North

hopelessness faces my south

Rough black youths use my alley

as a throughway

and bathroom

strutting through with bad intentions

my neighbors stare at me

with owl like orbitals 

staring 

glaring

attempting to pierce 

my soul

and locate my secret

place

I stay in a one level, two roomed

green shack

owned by a former male figure skater

from Palos Verdes

he collects the rent, always during the day

My small home sits on the corner of 12th and Centre

police sirens mix with Mariachi Music

the two create a disco of the damned

This is my reality

but it suddenly becomes clear

my thirty day notice

will start

tomorrow

Reviews

[FireWoman]

You took me there immediately with your descriptive prose. I can close my eyes and not only see it, but feel it too.

[K.C. Zbryk]

I like the way you describe everything that leads up to your decision, it gives the reader quite the image of your residence and those that surround you. Your descriptive words are unique and refreshing, and i especially liked the 'disco of the damned' line. Superbly written and very vivid.

[Amanda Buscemi]

You make me feel as though I am standing on the street, and I understand it as a cyclical observation through action.

[YouoweYoupay]

Rents and income is more flexible here, so I reckon what you described above must have been frustrating! Good title, enlightening stanzas. Thank you.

[Daniel88Batson]

A really nice piece of work. Strong imagery; I feel this place.
However it could be improved with punctuation.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your word are strong and powerful. Many people in this new USA are on a thirty day notice. I like the description of the city. I hope you are still going to make movies. Strong words make a world come alive like the details in this poem. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Raven Starhawk]

The very reality of this sings a multiple style of possibilities that all house their own set of rules. The magic of this will be long lived in this reader's mind. You have achieved much in way of valid concern.

[David Lewis Paget]

We all have our own realities, and the above doesn't resonate with me, thank god, because it doesn't form the backdrop to my life. I tend to agree with Mr Furioso when he says - 'You have to get out of that place today. It is absolutely destructive of all the finer aspects of life.' Cities are so mind numbing - clear out to the country while you can!

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

LoL I loved this poem. The descriptions and analogies are amazing! This is going in my favorites :-)