Purple Curtains

I returned back to my former home of San Pedro. When I go there it felt as if she turned her back on me.

Purple Curtains

 

It was different

I made it to the end of the 110

I took a left

On Gaffey

The familiar felt unfamiliar

The place I called home

Was now

Foreign

The misty cloud held onto Palos Verdes

Like great white dragons

I walked to Cabrillo but stopped

Short

I no longer felt the desire

I lost the lust

I sat on a bench

And drifted

To a short nap

When I awoke

The horizon

Appeared the color of grape jelly

Like huge Purple curtains

The clouds hung in the

Sky

Like a great partition between

Land and sea

I walked to my car

 It no longer felt like home

I felt like a visitor

With no place

To go

 

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

I loved this. Really pulled me in. Nicely done! I can relate to this piece. Finding that place that we call 'home' no longer feeling that way is quite depressing. I felt the sorrow so much it pains me too because I know how it feels as well.
Fantastic write!

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it can feel like that when you have been away from a place..you realise that your connection was more than the place itself, but memories and people make it precious to you..

[ImagineItAll]

Another great write!

[Demi Rose]

emotionally detailed. loved it.

[Everson Taveras]

"The misty cloud held onto Palos Verdes
Like great white dragons" Striking image.
And I'm sure anyone can relate to this poem. Well done.

[Becky C Strukamp]

This is an amazing write. I so relate to this, finding that the place one called home, no longer feels that way. An emotionally charged poem. Loved it.

[Brytt]

lovely images. You can really feel the emotion of the piece. Love the way this is structured, too. You parted it in just the right places. And the lack of puctuation gives the feel of indecision or indefinite emotion.

Overall, well done.

[K.C. Zbryk]

People grow and sometimes our past cant keep up with us. So goes life but you caught the realization that you were no longer at home here very well. This is a great piece

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I've felt the same way, even when the place I'm returning to is my current home. Sometimes it seemed choppy--"I took a left / On Gaffey"--where you broke the lines up into very short phrases....but I really liked the title "Purple Curtains" and the way that you worked it in.

[SpokenWord]

The ending sums it up perfectly. Visiting a place that use to be home often makes us feel like a visitor as the place has grown without us. I actually know that feeling so the ending made me smile because I relate to it. I think it just means you found a new place that is home for you.