Belong

Belong

A Poem by Colton Warr

She belongs in the temporary moments of a dream 

Taking me away from my nightmare screams

On my knees for my sins, her love redeems

She has, to this day, been my one and only theme 

She belongs to an unknown planet out in space 

I am crash landing and so I brace

The way back home I never want to retrace

Forever we are to roam the stars, hands interlaced

She belongs in the great blue sky

If up is not the way then I have gone awry

We can lay with the clouds until we die

If her touch is the rain, I never want to be dry

She belongs to the vastness of the ocean

Which ever way her tide pulls, that is my motion

Like to the sand the waters soaks, she is my devotion

I have crashed into her like a wave and I love the commotion

She belongs to all of the wonders of our galaxy

She belongs to all of history’s kings and queens

She belongs to the Angel who plays the harp and sings

She belongs to every golden thing, yet here she is kissing me 

Reviews

[rickm97]

Love is the true sweetness of life. Nothing compares.
It is everything...
...in its absence we are nothing except lost, awaiting that gentle rush to overwhelm us once again.
It is life's greatest joy...
...and its greatest pain.
It is as a dichotomy in nature.
I miss her so.

Well done, my friend.
I hope that you find love as true as that of my Karin...
...for then you will have everything.

[Colton Warr]

I could have not said it any better than that, my friend! So beautiful! I can't even begin to imagine or comprehend how it would feel to lose someone as perfect as your wife must have been. And I know she was because she picked a strong and loving man to be with. You will see her again one day and you will get to be with her for all of eternity. I am so grateful that you read this piece!

P.S. It makes my soul happy that my words can remind you of someone who sounds like an angel. Just wanted to thank you for giving me that opportunity. Thank you for your support.

[rickm97]

She was the strong one, and she truly was an angel.
But she, like all of us, was flawed and had her struggles.
Life can get very ugly sometimes, and soon I'll try to depict her courage in dealing with it.
Thanks.

[Anna]

This is very beautiful, you pulled it off wonderfully. The concept of love that you believe is above and beyond you.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Anna! I love how you put that last part. I appreciate your kind words! Thank you so much for stopping by and giving this a read! I'm glad you enjoyed!

[Anna]

You're quite welcome. :)

[ShadowWhysper]

I agree with Bear, this poem takes you on a journey through a dream to some abstract imagery that would definitely reflect the nature of the dream like quality to your words.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I loved that Bear used the word abstract to describe this. He suggested that there may be a better word out there to use in its place but I don't think so. I'm glad you enjoyed the journey this piece had to offer. Thanks for giving it a read!

[Lyingwithlions]

Beautiful and heart felt piece. I like the places it took me while reading. Lots of great imagery!

Thanks for sharing. :)

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, my friend! I appreciate the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this one and the places it took you! It means a lot for you to give this a review! Thank you so much!

[terry smith]

From dante's hell to the heavens above...from then till now and evermore....you are one lucky man.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you so much, Terry! I love this review, you should put those first two lines in a poem of their own! They sound like wedding vows, so beautiful! I am one very lucky man, my friend. Blessed and as fortunate as I've ever been. Thank you so much for this review!

[Bear]

Abstract is not a term really thought of when referring to poetry but that is how I would describe this poem. It starts in a hypothetical dream state, then transports the reader to outer space and even the boundaries of time. All done in a way that it fits together, it is an interesting style we will have to find a better name for than abstract, very cool.

[Colton Warr]

Thank you very much, Bear! I love that you used abstract to describe this. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece and the journey it is designed to take you on. I appreciate your support and your review, it means a lot! Thank you, my friend!

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

forgot to rate. nicely done by the way.

[Colton Warr]

No worries! I appreciate you doing that!

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

nightmares screams is throwing me for a loop. nighmare's sreams? nightmare screams? i like it tho.
3rd stanza i like.
like the sand the waters soaks i think.
Crashed into her...beautiful wave imagery
and the last stanza, very nice feelings there. i think i got all warm and fuzzy!

[Colton Warr]

Hmm, now that you pointed it out I took another look at it. Perhaps "nightmares scream" works best? What do you think? Let me know. I'm glad you got all warm and fuzzy here! I appreciate you stopping by and giving this a read and review!

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

yeah, no prob. ok, so nightmarish, maybe not. Nightmare screams makes total sense. there's a few things i'd fool around with. mybe lining up the syllables so the feeling flows or something but careful, its pretty solid as is.