A Breath from The Death

A Breath from The Death

A Poem by Billie Hanzen

The Goddes of Coldness blows her cold breath in my face.
It feels like my feet are freezing to death.
What is the meaning of this place?
Why am I here in the first place?
I'm all alone.
The only thing here besides me, is Death breathing down my neck.
The cold gets worse.
I turn around.
And then it ends.

© 2010 Billie Hanzen


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Ok I really like this poem, you convay the feel of it very well. Having said that I think it might be a bit better if - on the line: "The only thing here besides me, is Death breathing down my neck." you took a new line on "Death". It'd give it mre emphasis. Other than that it's an amasing write and I love the last line. =)

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Ok I really like this poem, you convay the feel of it very well. Having said that I think it might be a bit better if - on the line: "The only thing here besides me, is Death breathing down my neck." you took a new line on "Death". It'd give it mre emphasis. Other than that it's an amasing write and I love the last line. =)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great write - the first line was fantastic I thought - pulled me in...
Great description...
Nice work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Billie Hanzen
Billie Hanzen

Odder, Denmark



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Hi. I'm 17 years old and live in Denmark. I've been writing music, poems and stories for several years now. I play guitar in the screamo/metal band LaVey, and I also sing and play guitar in the punk.. more..

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