Dreamcatcher

I dreamed about you yesterday,

I dreamed about the moments we shared

Trying to let what you said

Not affect me,

Because I dreamed of us

And what we could have been,

But that's only my dream

To be with you,

A dream that goes through the center

Your dreams about us

Are only lies

That get caught in

The web

I hope this nightmare

Of wanting you,

And needing you

Perish before I wake up

Because I'd like a happy dream

To take me out of my misery

Of ever wanting to be with you

Author's Note

I'm not sure why I wrote this.

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

Perish not parish my friend. Apart from my pickiness I loved the title and the poem, I have dream catches in all my bedrooms and love how you used them to pen this piece as your dreams of love pass through and the nightmare of his get caught and ensnared punished if you like for being lies. You always seem to find the words to express the ache untruths can bring. Keep em' coming

[guiltyascharged]

Hm, this is cute. Very real and honest. Maybe you wrote it because of a future event? Unlikely, so no. I write about stuff I've never been through, but I say if I have. Good write, Ta'Shandra!

[JUSTWRITING]

Good poem...great write-up! Keep on writing poems...

[a burnt omelette]

Nice, bittersweet poem you have here. A minor spelling error though - its perish, not parish. ;)

[Becky Lawrence]

I like this a lot. It is very straight forward and doesn't dance around the real point with a bunch of metaphors and symbols.

[Ame Rain]

I like it :) .. the important thing that you wrote it with feelings :)

[thoughts of jade]

i love it...

[Victoria Scott]

The feelings are strong and clearly expressed...very nice :)

[Gilbert Saint]

alot of emotion yes, great design and form, but for me very little content. The feelings weren't potrayed as well as expected.

[Daytonight]

This is beautifully written. I can really relate to it. Keep on penning.

[Bertie]

Simple and concise, the journey is very clear and the feelings laid forth for the reader.
It's an interesting approach to write about something as intangible as a dream in so pithy a way. It's good, you write well, I'd be interested to see what you could do if you approached it in a much more metaphorical and metaphysical sense. Try writing it without actually ever saying what you mean if that makes sense. never make a direct statement.
It's hard but you're easily good enough to do it :)
I reiterate this is still a very good poem !