Everything Doesn't Always Work According To Your Schedule

The title says it all.

Everything doesn't always work

According to your schedule,

You see I have things  to do

And they don't involve 

Talking to you..

I have my own agenda

My own meetings to attend,

None that involve ever

Seeing you again

Because you said what

You had to say

And I listened,

But now its my turn

To talk...

I'm done with you,

You can find someone else

That will wait on you 

Hand and foot,

You see...

I have my own schedule 

And you're not included

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

Comment: Problem is BOTH end in the same place - an empty circular-file with endless echoes of self...takes multiple I's to make a We... but no We survives a being thats only I.

Review: Read aloud - the 'Dance' stumbles and the anger that gives it the BITE and honesty fades. The content is valid. The emotion is present... and people WILL hear the thoughts you express...

Take care,
Chris

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Very true, honest piece. Great write!

[Tasha]

@BaBy, thank you for the review. Self absorbed people just need to leave, those are the people you have to watch from a distance.

[MS. BABy]

i like this some self asorbed persons think that you are not important to have a life and youmay need to talk about you sometimes...I know so many people like this....and I have said just what you have concluded...I AM DONE WITH YOU...LOVED THAT LINE.

[Tom C]

I like it. We need to take the advice in this poem and do what we want to do.

[LadyNaida]

Short, sweet and to the point. Enough said! Am out! See you when I see you! This is good!

[Crimson Goddess]

:) i like it. keep up the good work. like to see younger minds at work

[Daytonight]

Well done! I like this. Keep up the great work!

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I feel like I can feel the anger waves radiating off of these words. :) I do think that it has one flaw, and that's how literal it is. Rants feel good to let out, but unless you throw in a twist--some neat figurative language, or strong vocabulary, maybe a unique rhyme scheme--this is just something that we already know a lot about as readers. It's a common problem and there's nothing new here; it's kinda white noise. Reading back, I noticed that there are some rhymes in the beginning--somehow I missed those at first--but it's strange that you don't continue with the rhyming all the way through the poem.

[NightShade]

As with all wordsmiths, we each strive to find the most elegant linguistic flow to describe simple things. In this case, I don't see that as necessary. They say that perception is reality and we each express our reality as we see fit. Sometimes, the most halting forms are the most appropriate. The path of least resistance is to flow like water, or to move as heavenly bodies. Simple. Direct.

Would weighty words and lilting meter have helped you express your emotion and added to the content in some way? Perhaps. I'm sure others would choose that route. The question is, do you feel that you expressed yourself adequately?

two schools of thought have given their voice on this piece. I say, listen to both, as they offer valid insight. Then take what you will from it and move on. We can only describe our experience. Our perception. Still, this form of communication demands that we get our point across. This you did. Any adjustments in style, are completely up to you...

[~Paedams]

True and to the point. Love it!