Daisy

Igniting the way a shade of light lights the face of lighter tidings, smaller whinings in the dark, stark fumblings in a park.

 Stop and start, lying still, her start and go heart rate accelerates drastically.

 A gel pill dated by a rascal hassles her tassels, has less than tables served for nickels earned, that rascal burned through all her coin; through all the voices in her head saying don't be turned away from graceful slathering.

 A tale of gathering woeful ailments abstractly, ad-lib crazy, exactly.

 Yes.

 No.

 Maybe...

 "Yes that a-way", says the master with tails wrapped around Daisy's deadly hide-a-way. 

Sapped faster of razed singularity, a depth of depravity wavers, savors the ingenious aroma of genius philosophy.

 Layered stones around Daisy's tighter place, stoned moanin' higher paced

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

My head is running around with this- the beat and musicality and flow of it has taken over my brain-Ha! Driving Miss Daisy to distraction with those "gel pills" until her tassles hassle-...Whaaaat?! I smell the genius aroma of ingenius philosophy" here for real..Excellent Wordage, imagery, all-"Yes, that a-way!" Exactly.

[Chase Dylan]

Ooohhh... You found Daisy... One of my more loved creations... She certainly has some tough times befall her, hah... Exactly... Thanks for the crazy unique review, like always, Annette

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Sapped faster of razed singularity, a depth of depravity wavers, savors the ingenious aroma of genius philosophy."

As always, you use wonderful wordplay. And I struggle to understand hahah 😛

Btw, I think philosophy is genius but.. Only on paper 😉😂

[Chase Dylan]

The struggle is only as bad as we make it, Yummy. You are the baseline for "understanding"... Do not worry if it matches up with other peoples "understandings"... Makes for a dreary world, if we always question ourselves based on another's views... I have to ask... What do you mean by that? Only on paper...? I am confused! Haha... Do you mean that in execution of said philosophy... Things can become... Muddled...?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

No I think philosophy seems a tad too impractical/theoretical/dreamy/unreal to implement 😉😛read moreNo I think philosophy seems a tad too impractical/theoretical/dreamy/unreal to implement 😉😛

And I'm glad I could confuse you hahaha 😂😂

[KWP]

yeah - go you - my pranayama kicked in big time with all those spacings! Nice one Bob.

Sapped faster of razed singularity hey - well that's pretty fast ...

I think Daisy is a very lucky gal, if I am reading this correctly - and she has a master and all - ooh la la ...

Clever like reading an encyclopaedia in Africkaans when you are a true blue Aussie like myself .. well done my friend X

[Chase Dylan]

I will not even pretend to know what you meant with that last line... As I am a true blooded American, and thus, black-blooded, haha... Thanks so much, KWP, Daisy is... A hard-working gal, that is for sure... With not the best streaks of luck... Not all masters are "fun"

[Kesha]

Wow.. that last line.. just wow! Silente this was awesome!! I love your style of writing seriously! Your poetry is on point. Nicely written

[Chase Dylan]

You are on point with your praise...! Thanks so much, K...

[Kesha]

You're welcome

[Ruth]

Not only free form epicness but a calculated release of metaphor, just the right amount to hold tension, brilliant! :)

[Chase Dylan]

Just like your review, PRS, Brilliant...!

[Kittenincake]

Relatable and delicately crafted. This connects to the working class on a personal level. Well done.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks, dear, you is the best! Like always...!

[Kristina Moulaison]

Well...you're like a beat poet...very cool! I love the rhythm, the cadence, the feel of your writing. This begs to be spoken word and forces the reader to slow down and say it in their head in a jivy staccato. The formatting lends itself nicely to this style as well. Great work!

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks, KM, that is a very grand compliment, and taken very seriously...! I love beat poetry, and write everything to a beat...

[Hiru]

It's really nice how you've played with words..I really liked it.!

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks, Hiru, I really like that you like it!

[writ rajat]

Very nice to read keep it up

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Raj, you as well...

[J.P. Bristow]

Interesting piece...I am unsure if this is a final draft or if your testing your experimental form on this audience....I think this could be worth further exploration and maybe do a lyrical vignette series ...as you graze the grit here but you could go darker and deeper...in doing so you could have a pretty cool prose piece here..potentially worthy of a poetry mag submission. Thanks for sharing! I love to see this kind of courage....write till your fingers bleed odes!

[Chase Dylan]

It was absolutely a test at creating an emotional "tie" to a female name... You catch on quick, and I am definitely doing to be doing more about Daisy... I am not the best at formatting or presentation... But it is fun to explore... Thanks so much for the wonderful insight and review... I shall!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha silente, sounds like a bad day getting worse. You have a unique style which I really like.

"A gel pill dated by a rascal hassles her tassels..." loved that whole stanza really crazy good. Izzy

[Chase Dylan]

I am so glad you liked it, Ms. Island... I am overwhelmed by the praise... Thanks, and happy you enjoyed!

[Island Hippy]

You're welcome, it is deserved.

[Chase Dylan]

I try to believe that... Heh