Riddle M

Riddle M

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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I live in young-at-heart
people get rid of me while growing,
why they do so is such a riddle;
let me help you with this guessing:
I'm the most underestimated virtue,
but so helpful and loyal I can be to
the ones that trust me and blindly 
let me lead you to happiness that secretly
stands in the smallest negligible thing,
I cure the injuries on your skin,
of the pain you once felt, I make you forget.
In this world of monsters, I'm here to protect
you, I'm the shield and sword a few see,
I guide these ones to the horizon over the sea,
to the rings of Saturn, to the moon and back.
Sometimes I sweeten the truth, of imagination I don't lack,
I do it for my friends, 
because reality may be too hard for them,
The one writing this riddle is a friend of mine,
without me, he can't survive,
I've helped him in the darkest periods of his life,
he's now so loyal to me as a man to his wife.
Since I think too much I've said,
I'll end this poem in the middle of saying ...

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
Ok, there are 2 enjambements, "people" (2nd line) and "let me lead" (8th line), that means that according to if you read it linked to the verse where they are or to the verse that came before, you'll get two different meanings (that was made on purpose!),
for example "people", you can read "I live in young-at-heart people" or "people get rid of me", to make the poem works you should try to read both meanings at the same time ;)
For the record, now I'm getting more ... "personal", I really care about the thing I've described here.
The answer is ... Innocence.

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Well I had no idea of it being innocence. I like this, and this last part:
"The one writing this riddle is a friend of mine,
without me, he can't survive,
I've helped him in the darkest periods of his life,
he's now so loyal to me as a man to his wife.
Since I think too much I've said,
I'll end this poem in the middle of saying ..."

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Well I had no idea of it being innocence. I like this, and this last part:
"The one writing this riddle is a friend of mine,
without me, he can't survive,
I've helped him in the darkest periods of his life,
he's now so loyal to me as a man to his wife.
Since I think too much I've said,
I'll end this poem in the middle of saying ..."

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice riddle man.if u didnt gave us an answer mine would be God.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like the gist your words carry :).

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lol...I'm so dumb...Had no idea it was innocence. I'm not very good at riddles. I liked your words and phrasing here. It flowed and was easy to read and interesting. Well done. Many people can so no virtue in innocence or how it can lead to happiness.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good riddle lucky did not have to think much answer there yes innocence

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this one is a bit hard

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very good riddle. I read the answers below. I like the way your mind worked. Testing us reader and leaving us with question. Thank you for the excellent riddle.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dominic writes well, and does well here.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hmm .. I was guessing "Memories" and then "God/Lord" perhaps and then may be"Belief" and then finally to "astrology and lastly "love" .. dunno if either is correct. LOL.
Its an awesome riddle. Great stuff :))

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

外人 (Gaijin)

11 Years Ago

None of them, sorry :(
Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

OK. thanks for that . lemme guess again :))

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