Unknown language

Unknown language

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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I wish there was a language that only I knew,
an eloquent language, so elegant, so new !
A communication code spoken by none,
in which all my secrets could with time be gone.

My deepest secrets to my friend Paper I'd tell,
and no living being to read them would dare,
I would feel free,
to finally be me.

Away from society's judgement,
my thoughts would flow,
no one to stop'em, no one would know,
and my mute message I'd write for my enjoyment.

I have so many secrets no one deserves to know,
I'll tell'em to my paper in a language only we know.

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
The goal of speaking foreign language is to be able to communicate with more people, when I was young one of the reasons why I loved languages was the exact opposite, the possibility to not being understood, whenever I wanted to write something confidential I used to write it in English (no one would understand it, I knew), now everyone speaks English so I can't, and growing up I found out no matter what language you learn, there will always be someone who understand it (that's the goal of learning it!!). The fact I've written this poem in English is both ironic and nostalgic, nostalgic because it brings me back to the days I used to write confidential messages in English and Ironic because in WC, English is the most common and understood language, so it definitely doesn't fit the message of the poem xD
The repetitions of "know" and "secrets" are not lack of imagination, I did it on purpose (they literally resumes the essence of the whole poem).

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You mean to say that you are not satisfied with elegant european languages and english? I mean we never stop learning when it comes to language, even our own mother tongue, no matter what liguistic stage we happen to be a, keep writing and all the best.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I wish i had a language like that!! where can I get one of those lol. Great write. Sometimes having a way to escape from others knowing what we dont want them to know is helpful. Great write!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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You mean to say that you are not satisfied with elegant european languages and english? I mean we never stop learning when it comes to language, even our own mother tongue, no matter what liguistic stage we happen to be a, keep writing and all the best.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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First of I really like your explanation in your author's note, interesting how things work, especially languages. I do understand the whole, writing in a language as if it's a code that another person won't understand. But while a writer writes their work, it is still coded even if in a language many understand... it is a puzzle because only the writer knows the true meaning, the true inspiration, the true imagery, etc... that is placed into the piece of work they write. With that said, I like the title, as simple as it is, it does speak a lot. As for the poem, I really like this and enjoyed it especially the ending two lines that seem so powerful. The way you speak with the paper and yourself about your writing, I love that.
"I have so many secrets no one deserves to know,
I'll tell'em to my paper in a language only we know."

Posted 11 Years Ago


oh I simply love this. the concept of a personal language is appealing... nicely done...

Posted 11 Years Ago


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外人 (Gaijin)

11 Years Ago

great :)
Very alluring and mysterious quality. I loved it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I used to try to make up my own language so that I could hide my thoughts and secrets and no one on this Earth could read them but me. Didnt quite work out very well, because I soon realized not even I could understand myself.

Great write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it! Interesting concept, well expressed. Nice job! :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I wish I had a code language that I only knew too, this was a great poem! 100/100 :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is great, not only the idea, but the excellent presentation of the theme.
Very good !

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice poem full of intrigue and nostalgia, i ike it

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