A poem for thanking

A poem for thanking

A Poem by 外人 (Gaijin)
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I came out with this after noticing i do pray only for asking ... but never for thanking !! I should be grateful for what God gave me :)

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God I want to thank you,
I want to thank you for these beautiful days,
I want to thank you for listening with patience to all of my prayers,
for giving me strength to face challenges when i am with you.
God i thank you,
I thank you for the food i eat,
I thank you for the oxygen i breathe,
I owe everything to you.
Thank you, Lord, for my wonderful mother,
Thank you for have given us the life's blessing,
God please, open the gates of heaven for my dear father.
I usually call your name for asking,
but this time another thing i want to do rather,
I'm not here for asking, my Lord, but simply for thanking.

© 2012 外人 (Gaijin)


Author's Note

外人 (Gaijin)
Ok, so in the second verse of the last stanza: I know rather comes after want but i put it in the end to respect the rhyme scheme (ABBA ACCA DED EDE).
Tell me your opinions :)

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I am a Christian and I do believe in God.

I, too, often find myself only praying when in need and this is a wonderful, beautiful poem. Thank you for it!

You have such a flowing piece here, and your writing style really speaks to me here. Wow!

:)



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nice peom

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amazing amazing as always :) keep it up

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Awww, this is so sweet!!!
I love to do this more often to,
and i love how your poem is very sincerely grateful to God!! Nice job!!

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This was a beautiful poem, and easily a prayer to be said at Thanksgiving or any other time of gratefulness. Only one typo, "breath" is supposed to be "breathe". Very good, I knew you were a good writer ^_^

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Like saying grace before a meal, a grace for the life we have. Nicely done.

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thank you for sharing!! GREAT WRITE!!

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Yes.... we tend to call on the lord for asking and pleading.... and forget to remain thankful. I'm sure we can all relate to that... this was a great write and reminder that we should do this often, being thankful is good for the soul!!
thank you for sharing!! GREAT WRITE!!

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