Separation Anxiety...

Appeasing demons...

Separation anxiety makes me uneasy, shapes me easily, queasy, I feast evilly upon the greasy lips of past travesty

Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned

Why should I give her thirsty guns to use against me

 I'm first...

 The one who shared mirth dreamily

Steaming and wheezing I refuse to give up wearily, barely surviving her Aires, I aim to breathe air when sky-diving 

Laughing and crying, i'm scared when repeating scalded lines back in tragedy

Consumed by the majesty of mages tact

I'm track-less, a puppet in repair

Fact-less, like I know only rare crafts

I give up... 

This tale is a wrap-dance, and i'm done making soul-aching payments

Ailments of whole-wrecking statements

Laments of shocking gray pavement, and I hung silently till the sun is gone

No more bereavements, believe you, me

I'm sincere when I appease demons with rum   

Reviews

[Maria]

This is a totally rad piece of writing, Silente and I applaud you once more. I love the fact that you have a way in putting down words that will go well with whatever you are wanting to talk or write about. I also have seen your collabs with Duff and the others, and those are superb as well. I have much to learn, and will continue to do so. Great writing my friend. Keep it up

[Chase Dylan]

Why thank you, Maria, for the continued support and appreciation shown... Means the world to hear, and aye... That is all I really CAN do...Pick out words that I feel tie into the emotions of the moment... Those writers are amazing, and I would encourage you to check out everyones writing... Mind-blowing stuff...! We all have much to learn, the grave is the end of the lesson, until then... Do your best and always show-up, haha... Thanks again, and keep writing as well...!

[Maria]

Thanks I am reading alot of stuff on here, and trying to learn the basics of Haiku and Micro Poetry as well...Never heard of that until just now...but sure will. Thank you for your encouraging words

[Chase Dylan]

Of course, I do not even now the fancy terms, myself, so do not feel bad... Hah

[Maria]

Lol. Thanks you made my day

[Slikhaar Ville]

Wow, great writing. The conclusion is definitely neat and memorable, well done. My only criticism is just to tidy up some of the grammar (unless it was a conscious decision) but that's not really a big deal.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, SV, I thought about it, but wanted to keep a few things grammatically incorrect, I am never one for staying too closely within the rules... Great review, thanks again!

[Elyralune]

I feel like this is a rap, and its freakin awesome. I love it. Its fast paced, and choppy but rhymes exquisitely: and it drops off suddenly in silence "I give up -pause-" bam, "This tale is a wrap-dace," and the beat is back.

I love it. Great work, and amazing vocabulary. And anxiety is fast-paced too, the symbolism works in every aspect.

And the imagery: "Consumed by the majesty of mages tact" that line is brilliant

[Chase Dylan]

Much of what I write IS a rap, heh... I love the review, and your eye is keen... As that is def' my fav' line...

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

Beyond intelligence...U killed it and i like it

[Chase Dylan]

Beyond a good review, thank you much, my friend...

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was great! Just the way it flowed and put me into the scene. It all comes so naturally. You are certainly a writer to watch! xo FLB

[Chase Dylan]

I appreciate the watchful eye, FLP. Thanks much...

[revalatia]

You definitely write like your flowing a great song. ..if you haven't already, I'd totally consider putting it to music :)~ probably already done huh? I enjoy the style of your writing, they have energies all their own. I'll be looking at more of your art. Thanks for sharing dude!

[Chase Dylan]

I would love to put everything I write to the beats that I write them too... However I lack ways of doing that... So, at least I can do my best to translate flow to penned word...! You are most welcome...

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you for the wonderful review... i said you are welcome, but I never said thank you to begin with... Awful manners...

[Shy Joe]

I'm sitting here reading this and my mind keeps saying, "SLOW DOWN!"

Maybe it's my age, but this feels rushed. Although it does feel as if it was written with anxiety, if that was what you were going for.

I read some of your other work. You have a way with words. The future looks bright for you.

Thanks for sharing.

[Chase Dylan]

Everything that i write is certainly rushed, tis not your age... Heh, thank you much, SJ... I appreciate the insight and praise...

[duff]

"Fast fallacy and i'm done, shes always falling over herself to cry for mercy and i'm stunned"

That line right there is dope. Put off by the behavior of others and their actions.

Taking your chances with the bottle is a powerful statement and that last line crushed it. Mad layers. Nice work man

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Duff, been crazy into training meh puppy... As well as just craziness going on right now... I think I am going to send you that line list here soon... Glad you liked this one...

[duff]

You are most welcome sir. I definitely did for sure. Haha, sounds like you have your hands full then. I'm down man. Whenever you're ready.

[Chase Dylan]

You could also shoot me some some ideas, if you would like, maybe help me land in the same stratosphere of genre... A bit busy, but I am carving out time, lol

[duff]

Absolutely. Let me see what I can come up with.

[Chase Dylan]

Good, I got pages and pages and pages... But no idea what page is worth a damn, lol

[duff]

Haha! That's not a bad problem to have. I'm the complete opposite. These last few months have been slow with the output. Super frustrating, lol.

[Chase Dylan]

Hmm, output is not my issue, like you said... Opposite for me... I can write w/e I want... I just do not like any of it...

[duff]

That's a natural feeling to have. We're always our own toughest and harshest critic. Sometimes good writing never gets read because of that exact reason.

[Chase Dylan]

Agreed, but knowing it, does nothing to stop the rejection of everything, anyways... Haha

[duff]

That's a true statement, lol. I'm right there with ya.
Lately it's just fragment writing. Stop and go. Insanely frustrating.

[Chase Dylan]

Hmm... We def' need to hang out soon, smoke... Then get that frustration dissipated, lol... Are you back in Denver yet...?

[duff]

That sounds like a great day right there but I don't think I'll be back when I thought. Certain logistics became an issue.

[Joey Nizz]

This was a really good poem, powerful feelings put into words.

Nicely done Silente.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, JN, feelings into words are all we can hope for... Apart from the actual feeling of the feeling... Heh...

[Joey Nizz]

Yea I agree with you, sometimes we are only comfortable with the words that we write.
We let our feelings speak through them.

[Chase Dylan]

^^ could not have said it better, myself...

[wordman]

rum will kill a demon ,i am told,a little coke to sweeten the taste

[Chase Dylan]

Lightening the load in distaste...? Vivid and clever words, from the Wordman, himself... Thanks...

[Island Hippy]

Aloha silente, another great piece. Swagger, rhyme and flow wrapped around a very powerful message. Izzy

[Chase Dylan]

Aloha, IH... (I swear to you, I always say "aloha" wrong in my head...) Thanks for the drop-in, much appreciated... I always love the word swagger...