Altitude Sickness (Collab' with Duff)

Altitude sickness incorrect diagnosis

Stalking green-crossed hopelessness

Correct dosage beyond his psychosis

Stoned oblivion mocked easy violence

A sandman hand chalking the counted

Stitched lips twitch from trembling slits

Butchering sheep until they’re mounted

A vision mission with incision precision

Towers power built to decollate flowers

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With altitude sickness 'n' tilting awareness I embrace incorrect diagnosis

hope for more dosage of correct hopelessness... 

I'm beyond psychosis when I'm stoned

 and oblivion comes easy when I hone my sandman hand...

 Stalking bland violence I'm like ISIS

 got you trembling and tripped-up

 a stitch-up...

 I might hitch-up the twitch munch of the butch-lunch that an albatross brought back from sheep day...

 I'm away prayin' sleepin' healin' stealin' visions of missions and missives

 leakin' heathens with precision

 I'm filled with indecision at the powerful towers of crimson...

 In addition I emit flowers sour

 do hours spent chopping at the stalks

 I stalk and balk at the hopeful state of stasis

 amazin' how obelisks can lack faces...

 Tact graceless

 I'm silenced and agin'

 a hay-day of hell-raisin'

 I'm a raisin pruned and tanned...

 A grand plan in the making

 paired with blood...

 A stud and b***h hung that delicious lick of vicious sin in the muck 

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Latitude and longitude erect hypnosis 

Balking when seen in the hopeful stasis 

Collective roses beyond pigment hoses 

Grown obelisks lack fleeced silence and

A grand plan bland in the making of the

Spit-up tips switch ten limbs for pimps

Pairing with blood of the delicious b***h

A vicious missive with prerequisite sins

Hours spent below adoring all the riches

Author's Note

Put Duff and I's separate verses at the start and end of this... Then I put the twist of them both in the middle... Hope you enjoy reading as much as we did writing...!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I have to confess that I don't follow every aspect of your message, but I very much love the imagination in every line & the word play with sounds. I particularly love the idea of "incorrect diagnosis" & the various remedies stated in medical terms, but also having a bigger meaning rooted in life experience. Good job of using crude intensity just right (not excessive, but needed).

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Duff is an amazing writer, and you should go check out his page if you have not already... Stellar stuff, and a unique, rather deep style... Was a joy to write this, and hopefully we will be doing some more work together soon! I agree, just the riiiight amount of crudeness is a very effective weapon...

[barleygirl]

I was wondering if "Duff" is the same person as "Papaya" used to be? I'm asking becuz of the same shoes in his/her profile pic. I'm pretty sure Papaya was female, but now you're talking like Duff is a guy, so I'm all confused. Anyhow, I've only read a few of Duff's postings so far & I'm sure it's awesome for you to be so encouraging! *smile*

[Chase Dylan]

Aye, it is indeed awesome... I remember Papaya... I am under the impression Duff is a guy, and a different person, hah... Hopefully I am correct...

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

I'm old but I have to say it- SO DOPE!! Silente & duff unleashed genius- what more can one say? "Altitude Sickness" altered consciousness rhythmic rant with def'-defying imagery and skillful rhyming pattern-"hitch-up the twitch munch of the butch-lunch that an albatross brought back from sheep day"--stone- cold Coleridge and Hannibal Lecter! Kudos my friends! Love it!

[Chase Dylan]

We can say w/e we want, regardless of age...! This IS dope...! Haha, and thanks to Duffs mystifying writing power, I was able to hitch a few of my silly rhymes into a powerful wagon of horror... I call being Hannibal... Just saying that now... Haha, thanks, Annette, again... For the fun fun fun ride of insight...

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Thanks for that! You go Hannibal! I so wish I could write like both of you, truly.....Keep the Monster Collab going- great Yin and Yang, and blood, horror, gore, etc.-great thoughts for the day-just saying... Ha!:)

[Chase Dylan]

I love you, haha... If you say I can be Hannibal.. Then seriously... I love you... We hope to continue the collab'ing as well... It is certainly great, and for more than a day, hah!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Love back!:))

[Raven Moonchild]

Wow,this is amazing. The depth of this is mind boggling. (throws horns)

[Chase Dylan]

Comes straight from the depth master himself, Duff... Thanks so much, Raven... *Hornssssss*

[Raven Moonchild]

Ah,I spy a fellow metal head,yes?

[Chase Dylan]

I spy with my little eye, a metalicious dead-head, aye... That you do...

[Raven Moonchild]

>:) METALHEADS UNTIE!!!!!!!!!

[Raven Moonchild]

What's your favourite band?

[Chase Dylan]

I love System of a Down to a fault now that iv gotten a bit older... But...! Still dig Black Dahlia Murder a lot... Hard to really nail it down, and I have since become more immersed in hip-hop than my old metal days... BUT I STILL HAVE THE HORNS, haha...

[Raven Moonchild]

Bleh,I'm not really into hip hop. lol YES TO SYSTEM OF A DOWN!!!!!!!!!!! (throws horns) I've never heard of Black Dahlia Murder. lol Have you ever listened to Cradle of Filth? It's so awesome!!!!! :D

[Chase Dylan]

Absolutely... Have I listened to... Who do you think I am, haha... Who HASN'T listened to Cradle of Filth... Rhyming is life, heh

[Raven Moonchild]

lol Sadly,not many people even know Cradle. Dani is so awesome!!!!! What's your favourite song? I love Born in a Burial Gown and Temptation.

I love to rhyme all the time.
So many try to mime the words they find in slime.

[Chase Dylan]

It has been a minute, I could look it up, though, haha...

Rhyming is life betwixt strife no lie is mimed out in slime-grind a limelight of grand design i fly in grime i slyly ply guile eyes im iodine blind, fine

[Raven Moonchild]

(jumps back and bows) And so before me,stands the rhyming metalhead master. (throws horn in salute)

[Chase Dylan]

Haha, a rhyming metal-head master... That sounds dope af, lolol...