Hiccup Over The Moon

I took a trip past the earths moon.

I swooned and spooned the honey from on off the lips of frothy wisps that resided in the space of outer space...

Face to face with a trace of myself.

Mirror image wealth...

Now floating in the inner atmosphere.

My inner-ear hurts...

My ear-drums popped and bled.

Outta moth balls...

Spheres are another word for when we fall and look up...

The faint trace of a hiccup outlines the place where the moon used to shine.

Reviews

[pia]

*bobs head back and forth while reading this*
This was soooo well written and intricate. I mean so many nice images at some point i just imagined a *random* Doolen just floating about being himself. This was super cute and reflected all those vast thoughts and emotions one would find within themselves. I loved the rhythm and flow as well.....amazing stuff !!!

[Chase Dylan]

*Bobs head back 'n' forth while reading this*... You always make me laugh, Pie... Thanks very much... Not sure if cute was what I was going for, but I will take it...! I can just imagine a random "Pie", with a silly look on her face, floating in the sky, just being herself... But on the sly... Hah

[pia]

Cute is my way of saying "GRRRRR AMAZEEE OMFG SLAAAAYYYY " but one must contain their inner excitement and appreciation when its too overwhelming for a "sophisticated" site like this hence i shall try to hide it behind the word "cute". I always have an airheaded poker faced expression lool XS

[Chase Dylan]

Lmao... You... Rofl... "Sophisticated"... This site...? Hahaha... Goood one, Pie. I liked that though, better than cute, in all honesty... Grr-Amazee-Slayyyy... Works for meh. I think I need to listen to Lady Gaga's "Poker Face", now... Damn you...

[pia]

Lady Gaga is queen bee though.

[Chase Dylan]

I listened to it, then went back to my safe circle. Queen bee, but keep the honey, please.

[pia]

Beyonce can be queen too sometimes.
Lady Gagas music kinda went sucky with the passage of time.

[Weeping willow]

Really wonderful write,nice flowing poem.Words move together like a dance.Loved it

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, I love writing AND dancing, so... That is music to my ears...

[Dreambound]

Love it! Great flow to this piece :)

[Chase Dylan]

Love the review! Thanks much for this one

[duff]

Again, you have your own style but it's cool to watch how you can change it up. That's that hip hop coming out. There's always that rhythm there but the different breaks make it a fun read. You never allow the readers attention to drop and at the end of the day we are entertainers and you do it quite well my friend. A pleasure to take part in.

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Duff, I am always trying change-ups, experiments, collab's... It all helps broaden my horizons... I like that, had not thought of it in that way before... An entertainer, indeed... A pleasure, thanks again, friend

[duff]

You're very welcome. Inspiring stuff man.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

My friend, you are on an extraterrestrial transcendental plain that we mortals can only guess at! Genius words, rhyme, rhythm, flow. Can I say, 2020, A Space Odyssey?? "Face to face with a trace of myself"...out so far, we start anew. Love this!

[Chase Dylan]

Well, well, well... Annette... Your reviews are about as sweet as a bowl full of honey... Thanks ever so much, your words never fail to light a smile... Thanks again, and if I am on another plain of existence... That would make a lot of things make a lot of sense

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Thank you S.! You and Kaliope are both brilliant poets!:)

[Chase Dylan]

D'aw, well thanks again... I know we try, lol

[Riddhi]

Great work!!!It was a short , simple and beautiful poem in which you carved all words into these beautiful lines..
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing
Take care
Riddhi

[Chase Dylan]

Thank very much, Riddhi... Sometimes writing very much does feel like carving... Take care of yourself, as well.