You + Me = DEATH

You + Me = DEATH

A Poem by Elrebmik™
"

Fear me...for I AM DEATH...

"

Tragic lies linger in the air...

Your screams strip your throat bare.

 

You question...

Can they hear me?

Do they care?

 

You cowar in the darkness...

 

but you are not alone....

For it is I...FEAR...creeping through your bones.

 

Commanding you like a puppet on strings...

but it is not entertainment that I bring.

 

So FEAR ME my child...

For I am DEATH...

AND I WILL TAKE YOUR LAST BREATH...

© 2010 Elrebmik™


Author's Note

Elrebmik™
Inspired by Bring Me the Horizon's song Braille. :)

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I love BMTH(:
This poem was incredibly good, I really enjoyed reading it through. It was very smooth the whole way through, and I love how you made the words look on the page, and how you wrote it as well. My favorite stanza was the second to last. Such a great way to describe fear. "Commanding you like a puppet on strings".
Great work, I love it! I'll be checking out more of your stuff(:

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow. I really liked this. It's kind of creepy.
Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


You can really attach the reader to the poem, this was mesmerizing, in the way that I couldn't stop reading it because it's like the 'fear' was pulling me in and I wanted to hear what it had to say. I loved your use of the font and size, it added alot to the poem, I think that those little things contribute alot to a piece. I can really imagine this piece in my head as if I was cowering in a corner and mist was flowing around me while I keep hearing this voice. :P
Anyways... great poem :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I found this poem to be very thrilling and great! The ryhme scheme was great and so was the poem overall! It was very dark, but an amazing and wonderful poem! I loved it! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


=D wow i love it =]

Posted 12 Years Ago


total awesomeness! I even felt a little scared because the 'fear' was kinda... mean and evil *go and hides cowering in a dark corner* :P

Posted 12 Years Ago


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City of Plagues and Vampire Pandas, GA



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