The Last Dream. Collab.

Check out Sandra. Here on writers. She is a great personal friend and a great writer she and i wrote this together that's the reason for the style changes

[20:27:00] A Fallen Hero: She screamed "Goodbye" From the doorway

Chrushed he stood in the room

[20:27:04] A Fallen Hero: Why must i live this 

this terrible nightmare

[20:29:21] Inuchan: This nightmare 

isn't what I want

Why do I have

[20:29:25] Inuchan: have to live through this

[20:30:30] A Fallen Hero: I scream at the face looking back at me in the mirror

Hate is what hits me when i see it

I feel flawed and fucked over

this perfect face that shattered me

[20:31:42] Inuchan: Through my blood shot eyes

I still see the last memory of her

She's taking the last few steps out of my garden

My heart screams at her wanting her back

[20:33:06] A Fallen Hero: I smash the mirror as this relflection makes a foul grin

What is this pain i'm in?

I want out, F**k the feelings

Anger is not what i want to live in

[20:33:38] Inuchan: I look at the mirror

Smiles as I see the blood on my hand

[20:34:07] Inuchan: I lie on the ground

infatuated by those feelings

[20:34:29] A Fallen Hero: I Scream out as i hit the cold bathroom floor

[20:34:59] A Fallen Hero: I wish i could close the door

or just leave it open for her to see

The f*****g pain she left me

[20:35:45] Inuchan: Let her see what she did

what sort of sorrow I'm in

Let her see how much I love her

just to get the last look at her face

[20:36:46] A Fallen Hero: She screams goodbye now

I run to the window and jump

Jump just in time for me to land in front of her

To see her bow to me one last time

[20:37:45] Inuchan: I look at her

her eyes were filled with tears 

I look deep  inside her soul

as she walks away

[20:38:47] A Fallen Hero: I die there in the street.

How i wish she would Leave

Just as she left there in my dream

I f*****g kill myself her love to pass

[20:40:36] Inuchan: Here I am

dying on the street

in a pain I can't handle

caused by the one I love

A Fallen Hero Collab With Sandra : The Last Dream

Written 08/01/2011

Dedication : Unknown

Author's Note

Honest Opinion
This is a collab creds to Sandra
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Reviews

[Chelsea]

I must disagree with Amora on this one. It's quite scattered, but that's what makes it so unique. It gives you a feeling of distance, I can't quite find the word I'm looking for.... But a neat feel to it :)
I love how you included the time, very clever :) Great write!

[Drako]

i never thought to do a collaboration with someone for a poem. you two worked really well together for this. you two play off the emotions of the other really well. this is a unique idea. this is something i'd like to try with someone. i've never seen it before

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting conversation between two people. You both did well create a interesting conversation and opening the doors to more questions.
Coyote

[E.H. Monroe]

Fire. Pure fire.
Collabs and Cyphers and group pieces are the pitch perfect blending of distint styles and rhyme seperation.
Nice job folks

[A Risen Heroine.]

I like this one! :D
We're great togehter! :D

[Jonathan De Elvira]

i think it's cool, might be hard to read for some who prefers a so called clean poem or love poem or whatever...i found this intimidating and intriguing as well...