An undedicated note pt 2

A Hero 

Falls from grace

He swims in

Oceans of Hate

Nothing here for Him

Lost causes are what made Him

Hate takes it’s place

In His weathered and wasted Heart

Needing nothing but love

She has betrayed Him

Left Him bleeding on the ballroom floor

He screams out 

“Someone save me”

He calls out

“Hear me, someone kill me and rid me of this misery”

A Fallen Hero - An Undedicated Note Pt 2

Written 15/01/2011

Dedication : Undedicated.

Author's Note

Honest opinion

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we play the wounded hero. Sometime we play the A*s walking out the door. I learn too late to be kind. Karma can bite you in the a*s. A very strong and sad poem. Better to rise up stronger and with anger to motivate you to find something better. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[E.H. Monroe]

This reeks of early nail driven Napalm Death grind core lyrics.
55 second songs of blasting beats and acid guitars.

Horns to the sky my friend

[Kathryn Saunders]

Love the imagery, also, how you capitalize Him to show the importance of the character. Very good. 10/10

[Chelsea]

Oh I like it alot!! Pretty dark material, but I love your words...
A Hero
Falls from grace
He swims in
Oceans of Hate



That is so brilliant! You used amazing imagery here :)
Awesome!!

[Drako]

a bit dark, and somewhat depressing. but it does sound like the hero is really fallen. good work