Bursting Light

Light of my life bursts through bright morning sky
Touching my soul, so desperate to fly
Cottonbud clouds shroud past regrets
Holding thumbs for when we first met

Soft breeze of passion sees love swimming in the air
Hands express pure gentleness running through your hair
Mischevious golden waves of inviting amber rays
Forever on fire, we dance, pulsate and sway

Smouldering skin, sensuous shoulders burn
Heat of the day says we never learn
Eyes move in places never caught in the shade
Love breathes forever in a breeze that never fades

Sometimes sad raindrops explode on the pavement
Watching them land sparkling with wry amusement
Destiny will save us, locked within stares
Flavours explode incandesecent with flair

Fancies and musings of shimmering moonbeams
Together at night in adoring dreams

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

Man, you've got it bad. Should I send over Dolly for a wee visit? Stephanie, even? Aw, shucks, Gary, the romance is oozing from your fingers now!!!! It's incredibly sickening, I mean, adorable. ; ) Your words lift me up to a fantasy realm....and make me want to linger there all day. Excellent work.

[Jenny Davis]

Mystical, beautiful...bravo! This is so tenderly written as if you touched her hand and there was magic :-)

[Ryan Jaimz Knight]

This is a nice piece, and a great way to end a long day. I loved reading it, the rhythm easy, the cadence gentle, and the pacing smooth. Great job!
BJH

[The Random Writings Of ..]

There is something so beautiful in this piece that makes me feel great just reading it. You have described so well the emotion of love and fear at the same time, So beautiful and so pure. Absolutely wonderful!!!

xoxo

[Dead Angel]

Gary you sure do know how to make a girl melt!! as i read this poem i pictured my bf reciting it to me and just melting in his arms. well who ever the lucky girl in your life is be sure to keep her because she's doing one heck of a job inspiring you. this was beautifully written and the imager was amazing. great job!!! :)

[Raef C. Boylan]

"Smouldering skin, sensuous shoulders burn
Heat of the day says we never learn" - a nice bit of realism amongst the romance...the sun can be dangerous...maybe love also?

This kind of poetry isn't really my style but I think you've done a nice job with the rhyme scheme and imagery.

Thanks for sharing.

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Together at night in adoring dreams YES!!!! There should be more of that...off to read Nat's and then the collaboration...
Helen :-)

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very romantic and beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. debileah

[Rain]

THAT is a love poem, Plus!! Really, there is so much tenderness and sensuality all through every line. Great job..

oh my gosh... that is really beautiful!

Seriously, I am a huge fan of poetry and I've read numerous ammounts of poetry and sonnets etc and this is one of the best love poems I've ever read. It's the sort of thing a girl would absolutely love to have written for her, you should be really proud of this well done! It has a "roll off your tongue" sort of rythmn and I ADORE the word incandescent.... this definately gets my vote! And congrats, I think you are the only person I have ever given 100% rating to! I'd love to read more by you if this is the quality you produce :) x

[Floating on the feather..]

The write here is as good as the picture.... Passionately penned down words of love and agony very well merged with nature.

Greaaaaaaaaaat...
Shinjini