Bursting Light

Light of my life bursts through bright morning sky
Touching my soul, so desperate to fly
Cottonbud clouds shroud past regrets
Holding thumbs for when we first met

Soft breeze of passion sees love swimming in the air
Hands express pure gentleness running through your hair
Mischevious golden waves of inviting amber rays
Forever on fire, we dance, pulsate and sway

Smouldering skin, sensuous shoulders burn
Heat of the day says we never learn
Eyes move in places never caught in the shade
Love breathes forever in a breeze that never fades

Sometimes sad raindrops explode on the pavement
Watching them land sparkling with wry amusement
Destiny will save us, locked within stares
Flavours explode incandesecent with flair

Fancies and musings of shimmering moonbeams
Together at night in adoring dreams

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

Man, you've got it bad. Should I send over Dolly for a wee visit? Stephanie, even? Aw, shucks, Gary, the romance is oozing from your fingers now!!!! It's incredibly sickening, I mean, adorable. ; ) Your words lift me up to a fantasy realm....and make me want to linger there all day. Excellent work.

[O!]

I felt the breeze which gave me goosebumps!

I would love to be a part of the picture. Is there room to be a part of the poem? hahahaha j/k

very nice.

x,
O!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Beautifully written... yes when you love someone truly you are there even when days are stormy and bleak and when the sun is shining you smile and take it all in. Very sweet poem.

[Phil & Bren's Colla..]

So passionate and beautiful. I love the imagery. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Nikki]

Holy hell...wow that was...interesting...and beautiful at the same time. trust be told i went perv on what i read..... ^^ beautiful imagry..but im sure that has already been said. i hate that when im one of many on a poem cause i think im repeating myself to much.

Well beautiful poem and if there is a certain poem you want me to comment on and such just write me and ill get straight to it.

all the love and such
Nikki

[Scirrocco]

A very sensual elegant piece that spoke of nothing but love and passion. I can respect this because it's a topic that I'm not that good at speaking about.

"Sometimes sad raindrops explode on the pavement
Watching them land sparkling with wry amusement "

Intelligently written Gary

[Kathleen Marie]

Beautiful imagery. I really like these two lines, "Heat of the day says we never learn Eyes move in places never caught in the shade".

This poem is full of passion and longing. Thanks for a great read.

[Maxwell]

Hehe, the beginning is sooooo happy that the fourth stanza actually surprises me. I'm like "whoah, what happened to cottonbuds and sunshine and flowers and dancing and singing?" I think if you're going to include that line at all (sad raindrops), just make sure it doesn't stand alone. Transition is what I mean, I guess.

But great with the effect. Man, if I ever get depressed I'll just read this a few times to make me feel better. In fact, it's almost overpowering. Well, in a good way.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

lovely. were you inspired by the photo? for it is gorgeous, as well.

"Hands express pure gentleness running through your hair "

loved that line. a beautiful piece to some wondrous emotions. :)

[H. A. M.]

Very tender and heartfelt are the words I want to use with this.
"Holding thumbs for when we first met"
At first I thought it was a baby holding daddys thumb until I read further down.
Well versed and captures this persons emotions I think.

[Joseph - Michael]

That was so nice and it flown so simple as well. I really did enjoyed it a whole lot. Also, you sure picked the exact perfect picture to go with the writing, they matches very well...

It's all good, so no worries at all...