Just Getting Started

'Comments' Poetry... because of Writerski7.

Smooth

 

You changed my life…

and then you changed it back.

 

Smooth move.

 

 

Hey Girls

 

Stop getting boyfriends.

It makes it really difficult to hit on you.

Wait until I’m dating one of you,

and then carry on.

 

 

Reiterate

 

Sometimes I'll hear a song

I used to hate,

and think to myself, "Wow,

this really makes me wanna stab myself in the ear.

Still."

 

 

Sunrise

 

So, I was watching the sunrise,

and it dawned on me.

 

 

To Those It May Concern

 

Be polite and tip pizza delivery drivers well…

They know where you live.

Author's Note

Grain of salt, my friends.

Reviews

[deadly healer]

i was laughing the whole time i was reading this as well. i thought the girl part was kinda funny. and it is true that pizza delivery guys do know where you live. lol. i adored this poem. hardly anything makes me laugh anymore and you proved that i actully can still laugh. thanks for that btw. i love your work. its cool to have a break from all the stress for once and be able to read this hilarious stuff. keep writing dude. ur awesome.

[r]

I love the sunrise one, and the "To Those It May Concern". "Sunrise" is witty and awesome and my favorite of them, and the pizza delivery is funny. Very nice. Hehe!! :D

[Emily B]

grain of salt, and all that, thanks for reminding me that poetry is life, and life should be fun

[Crazy Cat Man]

i like this piece. very funny

[Mary]

very witty and by the way I absolutly love you aboutyou profile again very witty, and genuine. and oddly entertaining.

[Daniel Gardner]

Awesome. I love the last one.

[gracy ann]

haha nice!

[Holly]

you're sound is familiar.

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Very satirical. The air of irony and wit in this poem oozes.
I absolutely commend your wit.

Perhaps your main objective for this series of poems is not humor, however most writers deemed it funny. It's not. It is a socio-personal commentary, in a tone of irony deserving of serious recognition.

"Sunrise" left me in awe. It's almost "humorously depressing".

Wonderful write! A fave for sure.
Alex

[Sam Severn]

WHOA! You sure know how to hammer the nine-inch-nail on the head! Absolutely LOVED "Reiterate" n' ADORED "To Those It May Concern." N' the rest just plain f****n' kicked my a*s around the room! COOL, COOL , COOL! ㋡

[Michael X]

you are working with talent, this was funny and captivates your readers,
the anaolgies are classic, my favorite is
Reiterate


Sometimes I'll hear a song

I used to hate

And think to myself, "Wow,

This really makes me wanna stab myself in the ear,

Still."