A mile to go

With smog

hovering among

crevices

of a sleepy city

the sun rose

from slumber

heedful of rain

on the way.

soon

as increasing showers

diffused puddles

on shiny streets

birds in flocks

flew

car windshields 

clattered

and a lonely reveler

from the night before,

braving every soggy step,

could only contemplate

the last call,

the last beer,

and the girl who left 

with someone else.

having no umbrella

and a mile to go

the sky

employing harsh wisdom

reflected his pain.

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Brilliant, Tim 🥂

With vividly creative imagery and emotional timbre rivaling the Free Verse artistry of Rod McKuen, you've literally outdone yourself, My Very Astute Friend.
Hell, the artwork choice, in itself, is a poem recital sans words, and it befits your gripping, life-breathing dialogue to a tee.
Many too-close memories for me … but ohhh, how real you've made it feel!

A lowww bowing sweep o' m'hat! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Relic]

Now I know it's good. haha Thank you my friend for your comment. I appreciate of your visit.

[Richard🖌]

Aw, big deal!

[Relic]

haha 😁😀😊

[M. J. Smith]

I've been that reveler. Stayed too long at the party. A true snapshot of the morning after and the regrets the linger long after the sunrise.

[Relic]

I appreciate your comment, M.J. Thanks for reading.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Whenever someone reads you and wishes they wrote what you just did, it tends to make an indelible impression. I always thought you to be an exquisite writer. Perhaps the reviews of those here
will echo that!

[Relic]

That's a really nice thing to say, Kelly. Thank you. :)
😁

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful Relic! i agree with Fran 100% .. each line for me a step in the shoes of your protagonist .. i love that he walks that mile with the contrasting setting and scene .. in the rain .. alone .. closing is killer says i! wish it where something i wrote ;) poignant .. striking and subtle social comment .. love it!
E.

[Relic]

Thanks so much for your kind review, Einstein. It's much appreciated. :)

[Fran Marie]

A well crafted piece
filled with descriptive
imagery. so we'll exp3
..nice work Tim

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Fran.

[Dave Brown]

I see here the indifference of the cold concrete city and the hopeless possibility of doing anything about global warming
Great write and image

[Relic]

Thanks for your comment, Dave.

[Cori Kate]

This was beautiful! Reading it one time just wasn't enough :)

[Relic]

I appreciate your comment, Cori. Thank you.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work Tim, one of my favs of yours. Just pure poetry.

[Relic]

Thanks so much andrew. :)

[Neville]

my back & legs came out in sympathy .. this is one of them that makes one think they are actually there .. super stuff :)

[Relic]

Thank you, Neville. :)

[Neville]

well worth it .. both you & the poem my friend .. N :)

[Relic]

.........😁😀

[Cherrie Palmer]

Well at this point the only thing left to do is a splash of the 'hair of the dog'.

[Relic]

Thank you, Cherrie. I don't know why my first "thank you" didn't post, but I'm thanking you now. :))

[Cherrie Palmer]

I've been having trouble with that as well. I think it has to do with the advertisements on the bottom of the screen. That blocks your message if you are using your phone.

[Relic]

I'm using a laptop. Hmm? Another quandry to add to the list of WC mysteries. :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

:) it was the butler in the library with a letter opener

[Relic]

hahaha. Glad you told me, I thought it was the maid in the kitchen with a pipe. :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

I never did trust that woman.

[Relic]

You shouldn't. She's young with big b***s and talks with a foreign accent.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Wee, don't forget her fuffled bloomers.

[Relic]

Never. They're an important pat of her attire. :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

I loved that silly movie

[Relic]

So did I. It's a shame about Tim Curry. He was so good too.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes it is I have always liked Tim from the Rocky Horror to the Muppets.