Crimson Pennies

The taste of blood always made me think of pennies....

 

 

 

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 Warm

 Liquid

    Coats 

  my throat. 

 Dark In color

 A metallic taste.

 Drops    of    pennies

 Rest     on    my      tongue.

 Crimson liquor too soon drips

 From   my   deadly        lips…

 Two    cents   you    offered,

  Six     Quarts   I    took! 

  I   bled     you    dry

 For  a  sadistic

 high…

 

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 I smile  down

 Eyes blank now,

 Breath   is    gone

 And  now  I   know

  Soon   you'll   return

 To  my arms, Where

 you  belong…

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Author's Note

Thank you Rodge and Liliana... (my muses)

please give me more than a good job... Can you tell me why you like it etc...

Reviews

[dark and twisty]

nice...especially the format of the poem...although i don't know why but i don't like the line - for my sadistic high - seemed out of place to me..

i like the second stanza best though....i interpret it as the 'victim' becoming a dead creature who drinks blood as well and hence joining his/her 'killer' which is where she/he belongs...

or maybe that's just the effects of me reading too much Twilight :)

[♥ Kinnixk]

Holy crap the format is cool. I like the second stanza very much.

[Patrick Gerlits]

A little to dark for my tastes but, prefrences aside, I found this to be very 'beautiful' in its own right.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

What a wonderful way to express something. Your right, blood always reminds me of pennies...thats not to say I put money in my mouth,lol
You have peresented a wonderful piece, with vast creativity. I did enjoy this piece alot. Brilliant!

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I love shape poetry! I really like the "Crimson Pennies". In my opinion, instead of six quarts, I would have put six quarters. Although I am not really sure that would make much sense haha. But I really love your writing and you always seem to come up with the most beauitful words there are and the most exciting and new way to present them. So thank you for being a writer and thank you for sharing.

[Angelic Darkness]

I love this, and the style it was written. It reminded me of the shape
of blood drops. The poem is dark, and of one who is in control. Great
job to you and your muses:). AD

[These Haunted Hallways]

AHHHH! Brilliant!!! This was such a fantastic poem, i swear to God!! I agree with Ice Queen. I love the format and the colors in it. Really awesome! Ur a natural when it comes to writing these crimson vamp poems lol. Excellent job!!

B.A.

[Annalisa]

The format is amazing! I am absolutly in love with the drops of blood. The poem itself is good as well though the ending is a bit weird... How do you return someone to death? But overall I enjoyed this.

[Wolfwind Words]

That was wickidly cool! I loved the form and the images, it flowed right out and i could taste the pennies!

This has to be one of the best yet! A+ for originality for sure!

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Mmm, what a yummy poem. ;) I love how you formatted and colored the lines to make them look like drops of blood. Awesome work!!!

Heather