A Piece Lying On The Floor

A Piece Lying On The Floor

A Story by Ishwar Grewal
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What is that lying on the floor stiff and lifeless???

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I Found Myself standing in a pool of blood,
There was blood on my hands,
falling drop by drop on the floor,
i searched around so i could find a living soul,
but a few steps away there was something,
lying on the floor stiff and lifeless,
It was a piece of someones's heart,

I walked around and found a picture of us,
My brain started flashing all the memories,
The first time we met,
The first time we kissed,
Our fights and our love,
Our claims of our ties made from heavens above,

My Brain remembered everything,
But....
My heart felt nothing,

Then i saw all our pictures scattered on the floor,
i started collecting those pieces one by one,
Remembering every moment in each picture,
But feeling nothing at all,

I realized, these pictures were not a part of me anymore,
while i was trying to figure out what was going on, 
I felt a sudden stroke in  my heart,
a part of my heart was missing!!!

I realized that the piece of heart lying on the floor,
was that part of my heart which was yours,
and i had torn it apart.....

© 2018 Ishwar Grewal


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I like a creepy story like this. At first I thought maybe you were starting out too simple, just describing the scene, but not really putting much feeling or drama into your words. But as I read along, I got the idea that your narrator is numbed out & unable to give the usual intense reactions. You’ve done a very good job of SHOWING instead of telling how this guy feels. You SHOW him walking around numb & not knowing what to do -- we get the idea this might be a murder done in a moment of insanity (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ishwar Grewal

5 Years Ago

Thank you for such an amazing review Margie... :)



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Giving everything until nothing is left to a person, who breaks you and walks out the door.

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Ishwar Grewal

5 Years Ago

yupppp.....you got that right Dee... :)
Dark and desperate. You create tone mood and a sense of anxiousness. This is the sound of love gone wrong...great job!!!!

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Ishwar Grewal

5 Years Ago

thank you so much crowley.... :)
You have created a sense of mystery in a heart break. Well done

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ishwar Grewal

5 Years Ago

thank you so much .. :D :)

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Added on July 2, 2018
Last Updated on July 7, 2018
Tags: heart, love, tore, scattered, blood, pictures, piece

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Ishwar Grewal
Ishwar Grewal

chandigarh, India



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