I Wonder if you Know

"free write" need to edit. ...

I look at you and see the past seven years,  

hiking through mountains in Zakopane,

sipping from coconuts in Puerto Vallarta,

fishing,

the sticky air, the freedom.

The way the years pull us closer and sometimes pull us apart. 

 

I wonder if you know I still notice you arriving in the evening,

the way you've let your hair grow thick, and wavy.

 

Looking up at you when you cook, my own private Ratatouille,

Mason jar string of lights brightening our balcony, 

as we sip merlot.

Then, curling up with you to sleep. 

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Beautiful.... I read the title AFTER I clicked it, and all I thought was, "I wish I DID. but your poems allow for moments of clarity and a bit of a mental bliss for me". The entire poem has the target of such affection in a most amazing light. I do not know of such a light in MY past, so to see it in your poem, where I have only been an apprentice to it in adventure stories and poems of past, it is a real treat to read LOVE when it is not so evident in my own conditioning. There is no "real" critique I could give your poems, it seems, because a selfish part of me wishes some lines were written for ME when being told a tale without woe and jumping into a beautiful page of someone else's diary.... "yours". Thank You for, I guess, having me come across you, and to be allowed some access into that mind of yours if only but for a little while until I return to it someday. : ) xoxo -Mark

[JenniferMarie]

Thanks so much for reading. It's nice to know what your fellow poets think of your writing. It's helpful so thanks again!

Happy writing.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

An ugly form this piece when you look at it on paper but I have read it 3 times now, it always flows and falls into place really well enhancing the story of the poem. I really like this!

[JenniferMarie]

Yes, I'm just learning. I need to learn how to present the poem on the page. I haven't gotten there yet, but working on it. Thank you for your review. I appreciate it.