Nothing Left to Ask

so here are some thoughts from a year ago - awakening and finally seeing the path forward ..

memories eclipsing moments
shadows singing lullaby's of the past
sunrise filled with a new dawns hope
stretching time to everlast
as we cast away illusion
traversing intrepidly alone
stripped bare of all learnt knowledge
the infinite beckoning us home
do we rise alongside the challenge?
can we clearly see the track?
moments creating fresh beginnings,
once we see, we shan’t turn back
crystal clear awareness
blooming flowers along the path
we continue on our journey
there be nothing left to ask

Reviews

[cycy]

beautiful powerful and well put together well written dear i love it so true

[Awakened Rose]

Woooww. So beautiful. The journey of ascension...
Thank you for sharing!!

[The Black Warrior]

I love this poem, great imagery and great choice of words.

Thank you for sharing!

~Suk :D

[KWP]

and thank you for taking the time to read. Glad you enjoyed xx

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcome!

[Unknown]

A beautiful piece, I truly enjoyed it... :)

[realmwriter]

I really like this. The questions that it brings to mind are not of challenging faith but of accepting it. It is hopeful and uplifting. Like going on a walkabout in nature and seeing the true beauty of the created. Beautiful piece.

[icelandicblue]

This poem is uplifting. Your rhyme creates an optimistic feeling as the reader follows the path of your poem to happiness that awaits at the end.

[Jeannette Lunete]

Your writing style is very refreshing . I like the inspirational pattern captivated in this poem. I enjoyed it a lot. Keep it up! :)

[KWP]

Thank you sunshine xxx

[Christopher Robin]

You have a rogue apostrophe. Lullaby's should be lullabies, it's just a plural, no ownership. However the 'hope' belongs to the 'new dawn' so it should read "new dawn's hope".

Other than that you're basically on track, it's simplistic, but nice imagery and to the point. ABCB rhyming scheme stays pretty tight which helps a lot. Good work.

-Robin

[KWP]

ahh thanks CR ... none of what you said makes sense to me just now (grammar not my strong point ... perhaps even no point ...) for your corrections I thank you ... yes simplistic is generally the way I write ... i believe it has the opportunity of touching a larger audience that way ... :)

appreciated x x

[Anand Sehgal]

moments creating fresh beginnings,
once we see, we shan’t turn back

that's the way life has to be :)

good work !
Love :)
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[SurindrasFawn]

Very well said. Inspiring to the adventurous dare-takers or even those who feel caught in an unchanging life. Perhaps the most desirous gain we have is to no longer beg questions about life. And once this life is over shall we be sated with the knowledge we acquire? Once the purpose and reason of life is solved I am certain we shall live like never before as the Kingdom of Heaven approaches.

[KWP]

:) fabulous words .. thank you xx