removal

bewilderment drapes

like a droughtstriken tree

in the arid plains

where souls linger

in hope

the lesson can be learned

before the last departure arrives

torn asunder

desperation squeals

the patchwork of

this life

cannot be reassembled

there was a time

the exit was clear

distant memories

flake and fade

into the winds of

of forever

surely it may be my turn next ?

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

I do pushups in the morning and smoke weed in the afternoon for that.

It still doesn't mean my cat won't die decades before I will. How many cats can I have? Probably three... three more cats. I probably won't be doing pushups when I'm on my last cat.

meow.

[KWP]

Im on my second dog - bless him - not a fan of push-ups, but I did manage some free weights today at the gym (so dull) and onwards we go ..

[wordman]

life,death,mending things as we go,

[barleygirl]

I've read some of your reviews, but I disagree, your poem does not strike me as being mostly about death. I feel the very authentic way it feels when getting older, you have to fight off the regrets & hold on tightly to the hope that there's still some living left for you. The fact that death is seemingly at the door is more like an impetus to seize the last few drops while you can. Your word-crafting is exquisite, as far as being beautifully haunting, just like it feels to get older (I'm 62) . . . always reminders (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[KWP]

HEY BG - you are right, the intention was not of death - moreso about learning the lesson that life has presented and being able to either mend the broken pieces or watch them dissipate within the sands of time so eventually we can move on - your reviews are always so thought provoking - thank you for that :D

[Wild Rose]

Agree with John Alexander Reads you are looking at death

It will come in it own time > No need to urge ot on

Enjoy life

[KWP]

:) the deep darkness unveils the mysteries of the world - but yes, while we are here, let's enjoy that :D

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I may be looking at this through a dark lens but I read this as someone looking at death approaching as they progress through life. It is a crisp flowing piece of freeverse and reads well.

[KWP]

ya - I am in a dark frame just now - excellent opportunity to explore the depths - :) Thanks man! hope all is well X

[John Alexander McFadyen]

We all go there from time to time KWP. If you can use it constructively as you suggest then all is good. Just keep on keeping on!

[KWP]

very true ... the ebbs, the tides, the rising and falling of the atoms :) X