Chained in Misery (part I)

I dont know how to explain this,

this undying torture within every second,

the pulse beneath my skin that rips my flesh to shreds - 

   It's unknown to me... 

My insides caged within its skeletal frame;

clawing,

digging,

tearing;

suffering till it's out..

Just like me...

Just like me in this world we live in..

Chained to where I stand;

  Barred from what I really want in life;

To feel,

To love,

   To live...

Still it's unknown to me..

Our steps forward have led us backwards,

as to live is to be evil,

if we lived we'd meet the devil; 

yet now is what we've won.

It's the voices we obey that don't understand us.

That deny us dreams of which we sewed.

Tearing our hearts and minds to pieces 

shattering like glass against a stone;

    our hearts; 

still looking for a home...

Author's Note

I wish to keep adding to this as inspiration comes. I feel it not to be complete yet but am facing writersblock at the moment.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Our steps forward have led us backwards,
as to live is to be evil,
if we lived we'd meet the devil;
yet now is what we've won."
When we dance with the devil. You will lose. I like the strong description and story in the poem. Sometime hard to find the right place to be. I like the strong ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[LivingDeath]

Thank you for your review :) What I liked about the lines you chose was that the top line had more than one meaning. If you look at the lines below it, each line has a set of reversible words in it ex: live-evil/lived-devil/now-won) which tie into the first line.

[fernii]

I love this poem :) Great read, keep writing

[stars are far]

well done..
i still enjoy your poems !

[Hidden Happiness]

'its the voices.....for a home' its feels like i wrote because this is exactly how i feel..great to know others feel that way too:)

[Lily Mae]

S**t.. sorry to swear but this is right on.. If this is writers block I want some.. I could feel the insides of my body churning with the truth in your words.. excellent write..x

[Justin Flume]

Fantastic my dear sir. You really hit the me in the gut there. And damn it was needed! (:

[CHRIS ANDES]

yeah,being a wanderer in your own shore
very emotional
=]
only one thing the word souls should be soul's
and "if we lived" can be "if we've lived"
=]

[LivingDeath]

Thank you for your review, as for the if we lived line; the context I used it in was on purpose. Its not talking about something thats happened (future tense)

[CHRIS ANDES]

ah,got it
=]