Mutual Submission

Mutual Submission

A Chapter by Louis McKraker
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2012

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    I.

Her voice comes clean and clearly,

Through an early morning haze--

It waves away what might seem dreary

And offers maps through my cognitive maze.


     II.

Now, as my eyes begin to focus,

She becomes the epicenter of vision;

And after a night that nearly broke us,

We each offer mutual submission.


     III.

As if to offer further humility

To each and every passive gesture,

She leans forward to kiss me,

Find my hand and locks our fingers together.


     IV.

And as I forget just why we were

At each others throats in the first place,

I learn that I am forgiven, as I

Have been forgiving myself--Touché









© 2019 Louis McKraker


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Really really good. Like I don't quite have the words to describe why it was good but you seem talented. May I ask if you used an iambic meter?

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Louis McKraker

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Vinnie.
I have used iambs, but not here. If it seems musical, it's because I wrote.. read more
this is very thought provoking

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Louis McKraker

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Freak.
I love your name.
Ghost writer

5 Years Ago

you're welcome and thank you
Beautiful and clear. Well done. I'm glad that this poem is in existence, and that you have created it.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Louis McKraker

5 Years Ago

Thanks, Lizzy.
I like doing these soft flows.
I prefer a mellow tone if I can have one.. read more

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Louis McKraker
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My name is Louis McKraker. I was born in Central Alabama and began writing at age nine. I don't have much to say about myself, except I'm a Piscean. I prefer poetry over prose. I love storytelling... more..

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