Child

Suzie was a superwoman

Making souffles out of cobwebs and dust bunnies

She always make sure

To show her child all the affection

Additionally the attention

Yes she was attentive

But her child couldn't pay attention

She loved her child as her own

Even though he didn't share her race

Or look much like her

He wasn't potty trained

But somehow she never ran out of diapers

A furry child with button eyes

He didn't say much

But she always hugged her son

She knew he could hear her

Knew he could feel her

He didn't move though he wasn't afraid

When she took him out for a walk

She always had to hold his hand

Even on the slide she always had to push

And he would just look at her with that some expression

She called him "Bear"

A strange name for a child, I know

Reviews

[linda m. crate]

On the surface this is very touching and cute, but there's something niggling at me. Like there's something off, I just can't put my finger on it. Perhaps, it's nothing, but something just seems mangled to me. Don't get me wrong, it's interesting, but something about the perspective seems skewed.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was very cute. I enjoyed it. xo Winter

[Bri]

very unique and clever. I like how you put it together and built it into something clever. It's awesome! Completely bombastic.

[Brittney]

Cute and clever. Touched my heart

[Riding the Rainbow]

this is an awesome mum for a special child...

[Kate H]

Though the ending is far from what you'd expect it to be, this is oddly touching. However, only "oddly so," because the turn that subtly takes place from beginning to end, is totally unexpected yet "oddly enough," you managed to get it in there . I like this piece.

[Diana]

This is sweet. There's more to the story than meets the eye.

"She loved her child as her own
Even though he didn't share her race
Or look much like her"- Some good things to ponder...

[zephyr]

I guess we all need to find love somewhere.

[L4rn13]

This write was very moving and expressed to me the beauty that can be found through taking care of another regardless of their age or race.
My favorite stanza would be:
Making souffles out of cobwebs and dust bunnies
She always make sure
To show her child all the affection
Additionally the attention
Yes she was attentive
But her child couldn't pay attention
As it was a lovely introduction with a strange ideal, to make something out of nothing, for someone important.
Very nice.