Scent

Some say

the perfume of your splendid

presence leads straight into the eye of oblivion

 

I say purer glass cannot radiate under the sky

 in such serene ambience

 

we should as two dance

Under God’s infinite smile and

 merciful

 grace

Author's Note

HELENA'S BLUE ROSE CAFÉ

1. Write a poem using all ten words
2. Use exactly FORTY words
3. The poem must use the words in order
(i.e. perfume, first, merciful last)


PERFUME
SPLENDID
PRESENCE
OBLIVION
PURER
GLASS
SKY
SERENE
TWO
MERCIFUL

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

While this is far better than I could ever do within these confines--and the lines are truly lovely--there does seem to be a bit of a disconnect between the second and third stanza. Perhaps, I'm just not interpreting properly.
In any event--as I've said, Moon--exquisitely lovely lines.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

In awe of your genius. Namaste

[AK]

Wow! This short poem is brilliant! And in a way quite wise too:) keep writing!

[Cole Hayley]

i LOVE this. It so short and sweet, but still its captivating if you know what I mean.

[Ruth]

Absolutely superb!
Beautifully poised...this is utterly graceful!
Enjoyed very much, all of it!
xoxo

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

You did a great job! It is so difficult (for me at least) to do a challenge like this and make it make sense. It is amazing to me all the different poems that come from a challenge like this...all so different....amazing.

[Antonio Valentino]

oh myyy.. thanks for leading me here with your wonderful reviews.. this is so wonderfully written.. looking forward to reading more..

so sweet

:)

[Caradoc]

Impressive.

This is an excellent attempt at the challenge accepted. I like how you've woven together all the words required into a coherent, well done piece.

Bravo.

[John Fitzgerald]

this is wonderful. the best i've read from this competition.