Scent

Some say

the perfume of your splendid

presence leads straight into the eye of oblivion

 

I say purer glass cannot radiate under the sky

 in such serene ambience

 

we should as two dance

Under God’s infinite smile and

 merciful

 grace

Author's Note

HELENA'S BLUE ROSE CAFÉ

1. Write a poem using all ten words
2. Use exactly FORTY words
3. The poem must use the words in order
(i.e. perfume, first, merciful last)


PERFUME
SPLENDID
PRESENCE
OBLIVION
PURER
GLASS
SKY
SERENE
TWO
MERCIFUL

Reviews

[FJ Davis]

While this is far better than I could ever do within these confines--and the lines are truly lovely--there does seem to be a bit of a disconnect between the second and third stanza. Perhaps, I'm just not interpreting properly.
In any event--as I've said, Moon--exquisitely lovely lines.

[writing mojo]

well this was a confined border to tight rope walk or fall, using words chosen by someone else. it's creative rule not many can bend or define, but you skipped very nice through the meadows of your mind to feather such a piece ..good stuff

[AleyshaRosa]

Challenge accepted
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/AleyshaRosa/1052377/

That was beautiful by the way. Very airy and soft
Koodoos

[linear]

This is beautiful poetry, you should be so very proud to have written such a work.........superb.

[quinfinn]

well orchestrated and beautifully finessed, a very solid write!

[MOON]

Thank you so much!

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

good luck with this one,it's a tremendous effort

[Helena]

Very nice indeed. A wonderful take on the "Ten" contest. Thank you for your submission. Helena :)

[FrancescaX]

lovely. i like.

[New Dawn]

This is a clever and beautiful wrote - well done

[kublakhan27]

Wow, that's a unique form, I've never seen it before...doesn't look easy but you've done a wonderful job with the words provided...great work :)