Leave me out with the waste

Obsessed seemed too clichéd

I want to invade your subconscious

Be the dirt beneath your fingernails

So deep you couldn’t get me out

Without breaking your skin

 

I want to be the wine that escapes

The glass and runs free on your lips

Until you lick me up, take me in.

 

I want to be the stethoscope

That sits on your chest

Separated from every heartbeat

Only by skin, bones, muscle, blood.

 

I want to be your full length mirror

Watching you dress-undress

Capturing you and every movement you make

 

I want to be the blanket on your bed

Wrap me tightly around you

When you’re cold or when you’re not

 

I want to not be a stranger to you

Beautiful someone

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful list of wants.. full of desire, full of gentle love touches. This is written with great care, technically and emotionally, perhaps your best, certainly memorable. 'I want to not be a stranger to you Beautiful someone'

Leaves me smiling, slightly sad, but applauding, Mia.

[Mia]

Thank you Emma! I sent the most time writing this one, I'm glad it paid off. Your review leaves me smiling with not a hint of sadness :)

[anxia]

This is so nice. You could have put the skin.... in different order though not necessary :P

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Wow! It could be such a loving poem and yet, that "invade" in the first line sets it up to portray an obsessed love so well. Also, the "so deep you couldn't get me out" echoes the invasion to some extent. The mirror part "capturing you and every movement you make" again could be so loving, and yet here that word capture brings a hint of chill...reminds me of being captured in a mirror in some old fairy tale. I love how the last two lines have the feel of that desire from afar, tells us that the writer is a stranger and wishes not to be... the "beautiful someone" is haunting.

[Mia]

You're absolutely wonderful! Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review this...wow...I love that you broke it down...absolutely wonderful!!

[The Refined Poet]

such intensity... nicely crafted...

[Mia]

Thanks RP :)

[Heather]

This piece is one of my favorites
well written
such emotion and imagery
strong words
I luv this piece :)

[Mia]

Heather :D Thank you, I really appreciate that!

[Heather]

No Problem
I luv reading your pieces

[Baby Ricochet]

That reads like obsession alright. Great poem.

[Mia]

Thank you baby!

[That_Girl]

Oh my freaking god this is... my favorite from you so far. It's... wow. I LOVE this.

"I want to invade your subconscious
Be the dirt beneath your fingernails
So deep you couldn’t get me out
Without breaking your skin" Envious Mia... So very envious of you! ;)

[Mia]

You need to stop or my face will explode...my smile can't possibly get any bigger...it literally hurts. You're too wonderful for your own good :) Many, many, many thank yous!!

[That_Girl]

Stop writing so well and I'll be able to b***h about it! I can't help but love your work! :D Many welcomes!!!

[Mia]

I would kiss your face if I could, you'll just have to settle for lots of XXXXXXXXXX (all caps :P)

[That_Girl]

Hahaha *kisses back* You're such a doll!

[Mia]

:D

[Patrick]

your passion pours out in this piece...its a glimpse of you just like your other work so well done.

on the lighter more comical note...this could be a stalkers anthem :)

[Mia]

HAHA :) quite possibly!
Thank you P.J, as always it's a pleasure to read your review :D

[TheJordBaker]

this is emotionally perfect. it's honest, tender and effortless. I don't know how much more I can say. I loved it.

[Mia]

Thank you JB, no more needs to be said. I’m glad you enjoyed it and that’s enough to make me :D

[Sid]

Great write this Mia, you bring out the desires very well in this piece, though I have to say it is somewhat creepy (stalker syndrome anyone? ;)), but seriously this very well written as always, this is definitely what real love could be like...great work!!

[Mia]

Maybe just a little ;)
Thank you Sid :D

[Sid]

:)

[Tegon Maus]

HI Mia... I liked this very much. To me, you are talking about desire. This is not directed to anyone. It says there is no one in your life at this time and your skin itches for the elec touch, for the attention, for the head spinning that can only be called one thing... love or at least that is what it is in the beginning !!

[Mia]

Thank you very much Tegon, I'm glad you like it. Thanks for the read and for sharing what it was to you. The best part of poetry is that 'beauty is in the eye of the beholder'.