As I Metaphorically Breath You In

 

I feel I could write forever

my pulse consisting

of syllables

and nouns,

your name being

the cardiac massage

upon my chest,

as I metaphorically

breathe you in.

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

Now there is a thought on both love and art. Strange how they seem to be constantly connected. Rarely as well as this however.

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's a pleasure for me, knowing you enjoyed it. Thank you, Ken.

[Relic]

Your title grabbed me the second I heard it. Mixing poetry and love is a great way to embellish a poem but this--even though short--is amazing to take in and think about. Almost surreal.

Excellent poem Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The brevity comes to me like a wave to the shore, pulling me in over my head. Thank you for a compliment I can wrap myself in!

[Relic]

.................. :D

[William Liston]

So soft and gentle with a beautiful visual presentation to match. As always, your work shows a beauty in simplicity and brevity, using smooth words and natural imagery to create the atmosphere. I love the title too; it gives a nice first impression. Excellent work.

- William Liston

[Kelly Scheppers]

You leave me with a smile, Will - every time. Thank you, my friend!

[Ruth]

Your descriptions always steal my senses. I am always in awe of your poetry, I could read you forever and a day and always find something new within your lines xo

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, Poppy. I always feel most blessed by the kindness of your words! xo

[Pete]

an intricate cleverness knitted into this. a metaphor about metaphor. living for the write so much that it is as natural as breathing & pulse and revealing what lies upon the heart ...

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you for seeing that, Pete!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wonderfully metaphoric poem about metaphor...and how for some poets (including me) it is like breathing.....

j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

...that's exactly what it feels like to me - as nonchalant as breathing! Thank you, Jacob!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words Kelly. You said everything needed in so few words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Kelly Scheppers]

So kind of you to say - thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Kelly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A thought provoking one here Kelly. The picture seems to suggest the role plants have in removing carbon dioxide from the atmosphere and emitting heady scents. But it could also be that the protagonist is mesmerised by someone they are attracted to. Flowing verse as always Kelly.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Actually, the plant had no play here. I was simply going with a thought I was lost in. As always, your reviews warm the soul of me...thank you, John!