When it rains

Only rain can understand my pain

WHEN IT RAINS

Look, how gently the rain falls

merrily falling creating crystal bubbles.

Chilly wind makes me shiver 

and the voice of rain soothes me to sleep.

The essence of petrichor relieves me,

All this is a delight and bliss.

Still, it is hard to accept the fact

of you being away,

The sky cries along with me

and there is no more happiness. 

Water of the sky cannot fill the emptiness inside me,

I am alone looking at the waterfall,

I cry and rain cries along,

Rain and I are together,

Here we belong.

Volume of cloud being burdened with rain

is nothing compared to my heavy heart.

It is rain who has cried along with me since the start.

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

Right now it is actually raining at my place. hahaha.. Its an awessom work. Rain with pain. good one. feelings described and the flow is perfect.

Volume of cloud being burdurned with rain
is nothing compared to my heavy heart.
It is rain who have cried along with me since the start.

these lines are my favorite...

[Abraham George]

i agree with you

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really very happy that you liked it.
Thank you so much. ☺

[jazzymars]

I second the motion.. haha.. nice poem

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you for reading jazzymars. I am happy that you liked this poem.

[jazzymars]

Of course, we are hear not just to post but to read also. Thanks also for accepting my request.

[Najam Us Saher]

Did you change your user name ?
It was 'Broken hearts'. Was it ?

[jazzymars]

I'm just new here. Started only yesterday. Who's 'broken hearts'?

[Najam Us Saher]

Okay.
You mentioned that I accepted your request. So I got confused you being 'Broken hearts' That's why I asked you did you change your user name. I am mistaken. Sorry.

[jazzymars]

I mean my friend request...

[Najam Us Saher]

You didn't send any.

[jazzymars]

Yah i'm sure.

[Abraham George]

jazzymars you didnt. May be you sent but she is not your friend yet.

[jazzymars]

Nope, I only send friend request to anybody, i didn't ask other request... :D

[jazzymars]

and i'm not 'broken hearts'... :D

[Najam Us Saher]

Hey I am sorry I was mistaken, because I got a request from broken hearts this morning I was confused that it was you and thought maybe you have changed your user name.

[jazzymars]

no problem

[Tony Jordan]

You successfully projected the 'overcast' mood in this one Najam. It reminded me of the song 'Blue eyes crying in the rain' - performed by Willy Nelson.
Nice writing.

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate it.

[.]

A nicely constructed poem.

Rain is synonymous with sadness as an image, and the repetition of it throughout your piece is representative of the inner melancholy you must feel.

I love the use of 'petrichor'. A lovely word and an even lovelier scent! A well written piece on longing for love.

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really happy that you liked this poem and understood the emotions for it. Thank you very much.

[Hasventhran Baskaran]

Rain always holds a lot of memories. A beautiful piece of poem from you

[Najam Us Saher]

I am really happy that you found it to be beautiful.
Thank you so much. :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Heavy raining here in Mumbai..good to read this work in this climate..loved it

[Najam Us Saher]

Weather is the same here. ☺
I am really happy that you liked it.

[Joey Nizz]

I love the rain, and the way you wrote as you described it was just amazing with the most perfect flow in each line, I honestly love this one!

Thanks for sharing Najam! ^^

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you very much. I mean it ☺

[Joey Nizz]

Your very much welcome :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

very well written...i loved each word because its written with elegance and pain as well...beautiful...keep writing, stay blessed.

[Abraham George]

stay blessed you both

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading Wajiha.
God bless you too Wajiha and Abraham.☺

[Wajiha Nayeem]

god bless uh both lovely ppl too..always a pleasure najam.

[.]

The way you related rain with the things you are going on is just awesome. It's true that when you're alone, no one is there, something natural will be there with you always. Great work! I really really liked it

[Najam Us Saher]

You are absolutely correct. Thank you very much for reading. ☺

[.]

you are welcome, my friend :)

[Broken Hearts]

I love how you paired rain and pain together! I actually have a started piece that I did a similar thing. This is such a great piece; keep up the amazing work!

[Najam Us Saher]

I would like to read that. Please send me a red request for it.
Thank you so much. ☺

[Broken Hearts]

I will do once I finish it.

[Mr.Writer]

An emotional, soothing write Najam...
The rain is described so realistically and the emotions of the person as well...
Well done, keep it up!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thank you so much for reading. I am really happy that you found this poem to be soothing.

[Mr.Writer]

No problem Najam :)

[Anjali]

That's the most beautiful piece written by you. I know I said something like that before as well, but, this seems so deep, meaningful and so so beautiful! I admired it's beauty as much as I admire the rain. Such a true piece, this is called creativity and a masterpiece. I hope in the future I can also use my creative mind like you do. You've become one of my idols.

[Najam Us Saher]

Oh! I feel so honourned to hear that. Thank you very much ☺

[Anjali]

You are very welcome!

[Anjali]

You are very welcome!

[jazzymars]

nice comment anjali.. i second the motion. ;)

[Anjali]

Ok....😆😆😆