Beyond Me...

Beyond Me...

A Story by Wordwhirl

Gone too far!


I am gonna kill you!”

He snarled.

But I didn’t care.

It’s what Lovers say.

When they get pissed off.


“Uh- huh? Kill me then!”

I retorted back.

I expected it to be a rhetorical challenge.

He won’t have the guts to do it.

He loves me!


The next moment a gory knife ripped apart my Heart.

I saw his bloody eyes staring into my lifeless ones.


A rhetoric gone too far.

Beyond my reach.

Beyond me.


© 2017 Wordwhirl

Author's Note

Just a random story.
Also rhetoric isn't always good!

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A deadly ending to the poetry dear Neetha. I liked this poem. Sometimes we need to pay attention to the words of another. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 Years Ago

You are welcome:)
Beautifully penned. It makes me remember about domestic violence

Posted 3 Years Ago

A dark story and you nailed it with your writing- I could imagine it all right in front of my eyes.

Posted 3 Years Ago

very sad and hurtful, I enjoy the emotion in this

Posted 3 Years Ago

A short story, Neetha. There is an opportunity here to tighten the tension.
“Uh- huh? Kill me then!” I retorted back.
“Kill me then!” I retorted.

A rhetoric gone too far

rhetoric gone too far

Quite often connectives (but, and, too) get in the way.

All in all, not bad

Posted 3 Years Ago


3 Years Ago

I am always glad to read your reviews Ted☺
I agree with your suggestions Ted:)
Thank.. read more
I like the last stanza a great deal. Nicely done

Posted 3 Years Ago

Wow, short but powerful indeed.

Posted 3 Years Ago

Simply fabulous...its so inspiring to discover that there is so much more to writing than all the love and motivational ones.. Great use of imagination...I could actually see it happening in front of my eyes... Nailed it ...

Posted 3 Years Ago

WOW! Impressive piece!

Posted 3 Years Ago

Yoh! nicely killed poem... I like it to hell... I'm reading it again

Posted 3 Years Ago

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23 Reviews
Added on June 15, 2017
Last Updated on June 15, 2017
Tags: Rhetoric, Love, Hurt



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