Sunlight

There's nothing I could want 

no pretensions

I've turned the words over and around

the old man craving time left for hate

as I glance at the old broken porchlight 

pathway now overgrown

I sit by the reeds where life has become my riverbank

imagining we are children in the broken morning sunlight 

one last time

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Deep thoughts and deep places can be found in the poem my friend. It is hard to find the good days sometime. But we must. I liked the ending. I am almost there. Waiting for the ending with the sun on my face. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Perdition]

Oh wow..glad I looked cause somehow this one got lost...Again much appreciation Coyote. The ending is going to come soon enough but "I have miles to go before I sleep" so hopefully still a few adventures left under this truck's rusty hood. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You did my friend.

[Chris Shaw]

I want nothing materially but if I could have a wish I certainly would like to turn back time and revisit my childhood home for a day. Time to be with my parents and four siblings. You can’t put a price on that. I sit by the riverbank often. We are fortunate enough to have the Thames and the marina close to home. Your poem brought some sunlight to me this afternoon. You sent me on a thought flight and I thank you for that. You also reminded me of my grandfather who loved to sit and watch the Thames through all the seasons of the year. A really enjoyable and rewarding piece of poetry.

[Perdition]

Probably the sweetest review I think I’ve ever received, to hear that it reminded you as these things remind me, and how time passes so quickly while we lose and gain memories, life, loves… It is the true sunlight of our traveling, isn’t it? Thank you so much, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

My pleasure

[Fabian G. Franklin]

But there is something the narrator wants. He wants more time. He wants back the lost days of youth. He simply knows that he can't have that just as none of us can. So the poem is about acceptance as much as disappointment and perhaps, regret. So he remains, daydreaming and static, like the reeds on the riverbank. Can he find his way back across the "overgrown path" by the light of a "broken porchlight"? The reader is doubtful, wistful and empathetic. You accomplish much in the condensation of feeling here. Well done. I enjoyed the read. F.

[Perdition]

I like your intuition Fabian, I once gave the advice to be the best of opposition’s opposition concerning a regard or two, and make daily the documentations for others to follow. This one sort of favors a turnaround in that regard, and I’m not sure that you’re more right than I am. Quite astute, and a wonderful review. After all, our time is our time, and when it comes to sunlight, there’s no better pursuit. Thanks for going so deep into this one!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I'm like everyone else. I only offer my own interpretation and opinion. They can both or either vary and certainly vary from the author's intent. But I try to give an honest review and I don't "piggyback" other reviewers or even read the previous reviews. They are entitled to their opinions and interpretations too. I think it's nice when people can have varying views and not wax vain in their own understanding. Perspective is a wonderful gift and not everyone sees things the same. How boring would that be, eh? The online social media thing is so disconnected from actual human interaction that people will simply attack other people for a difference of opinion. I shun that sort of behavior. Anyone can be a jackass and to quote Jewel Kilcher, "It doesn't take a talent to be mean." There's a few pontificating critics on this site. I have no tolerance for them. People don't come here to get slammed. Nobody's paying these people to bare their souls. They just want hope and acceptance and to be among others with like interests. At least, that's the gospel according to Fabian. Hope your Sunday is blessed with friends, family, love and good cheer. F.

[Perdition]

Well, I hope you're not referring to my understanding of your review as I am the same...it was sincere and I truly did like the outlook as I wasn't sure I had seen it in that likeness. The advice I gave was to another poet.."not on this site"..older gentleman that came asking for advice about becoming a Prophet in a non-profit corporation ...a talented soul with a playful mind but in your case here I think it actually fits. Not for you but for me...the actual limit of life being the want you speak of in the narrator...the time back that will not come back so to those that are reading these remarks I hope you understand it is quite fitting. Now as to Cat in Hat comment that is the rhyme scheme and it is perfect for the rapid fire of a soul in love and feeling somewhat lost. It's love through and through. Anyhow...thank you sir and I hope the same for your Sunday as well. Mine was unfortunately stuck in a lockdown taking a Covid test which fortunately came up negative...Phew!! Should have been in the mountains but my parents just went through it and were worried...there lies the porchlight. Thank you again Fabain..much appreciated~

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Yuck on the covid. Had our own bout back in January. Mine lasted and lasted in its aftereffects. Ten weeks of bronchitis. Misery. But all better now. And No, not referring to your understanding at all, just a general rambling on my part. And I'm sure you've met a few of the reviewers I'm referring to. I just block them and move on. Personally, I like the Cat in the Hat. It's my daughter's favorite book and we have a collection of Seuss books. Glad you dodged the bullet on the Covid. But perish the thought of any negativity on my part, all is well received and appreciated. Thanks again, F.

[Perdition]

Good to hear...not about the Covid bit but the other and yep Seuss was awesome, Truly!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Reminiscing over the past and reflecting on the simpler things makes us long for those happier days. Age has a way of making one appreciate what has been found through the looking glass. Seize the day then let it go. Well penned.

[Perdition]

Are you calling me old?..lol. Thank you for your kind words and review~

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

You're only as old as you feel. :)

[emmajoygreen]

A sadness here. Perhaps when your mind has turned back time and there's a need to grp onto things before they fade - or scar, Happens, life is not the bed of roses we all crave, need, hope for. Or maybe we. you, just need time for self, it's an essential So hope it slips into view. Take care, keep safe.. please.

[Perdition]

Thank you for your kind words and review~