Concealed Venom

Concealed Venom

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic
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There is a beautiful forest with a stunning river, but is the water really as it seems?

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In the depths of a bright green forest,

Where the gusts create a gentle shiver,

Stands a snake among the beauty,

To the mortal eye- a river.


Tasty expanses it reveals,

To a sore throat a huge temptation,

But those who greedily dive inside,

Come to a contrary revelation.


The water makes a frigid blast,

Its content now a venom so foul,

Acid eats the leaves with pleasure,

Silencing down every howl.


The forest shows its true shape-

Withered branches, destroyed earth,

Mother nature spills her tears,

For the child she cherished since birth.


I leave you with a warning, stranger:

Not every water can be cured,

So feel not bad for giving up,

Instead of finding yourself lured.

© 2012 Tomislav Petricevic


Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
Hint: The purpose of this poem isn't describing the nature.
All reviews are welcome. It would be interesting to see your interpretations.
Thank you.

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First off, this is a beautiful poem. The rhyming is not forced, it flows from stanza to stanza, an most of all, has an inner meaning.
The poem reminds me of my favorite flower, the rose. The poem implies that the river seems beautiful and perfect to the "mortal eye", but when you 'dive' deeper you realize that it too has thorns.
A reminder to all, everything has its thorns and blossoms. The trick is to enjoy the blossoms and keep from the thorns!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Great poem! I loved the descriptive words.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Used. In life, some things will tempt you. Actually, many things will tempt you. But the more you give in, the more you realize not everything is how it seems to be. Excellent poem yet again, Tom!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Tomislav Petricevic

11 Years Ago

I think your interpretation is the closest one to my meaning!
Thanks, Kenzie! :D
♪The Girl Next Door♪

11 Years Ago

My pleasure, Tom. :)

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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