Whispers from Below

Whispers from Below

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic
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A man is disappointed in people who betrayed him, so he also becomes vunerable to evil influences...

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So weak you feel like giving up,

There's no more blood in your white cup,

'till they were full they kept drinking,

While your dry body continued sinking.


What's the use of fighting, you now ask?

Speak no words, I'll hand you over this mask,

And a silver dagger for your hands, sharp instead of blunt,

Tread among the land, for it is the beginning of your hunt.


First night, you're still weak and insecure,

But every kill makes you more and more sure,

The blood on the floor contains forgotten verses of psalms,

As their still beating heart sits in the crimsonness of your palms.


A loyal servant you have been, so go and kill some more,

To my residence down below, you'll always have a door,

Infernal flames do not care, for whose souls they embrace,

Painful satisfaction they provide, with a quickening pace.


After weeks of doing my bidding, you begin to wonder,

Is there a purpose of continuing, since you sent so many under?

But before you can run away, before you can even yell,

I pull you down alongside me, into the fiery depths of hell.

© 2012 Tomislav Petricevic


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Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
Just a little story I developed in my head about Satan tricking people into believing he's their ally, and then still betraying them in the end.
And no, I'm not a satanist. So screw you if you still think I am.

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Predobra je pjesma, mračna i duboka, nije uopće tako " ne posebna" kao što si rekao, neznam ali podsjeća me na to kao da slušaš neki dead metal ili da si emo, kao da si neki mračnjak ili nešto.. ali svaka čast, pjesma je ipak savršena, vidim da si nekako dručiji od nekih npr, koji pišu pjesme o životu i kakvi su zapravo u životu... a čak ni ja nisam katkad takva.. sve kitice su mi super, stvarno je moćna pjesma kao iz pakla... "Thanks for sharing"..aaahah.. (;

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Tom, this is some really good stuff. The darkness in it is amazingly realistic. I felt as if i was in the sidelines watching this happen. Great Job! I would give you a two hundred but this thing won't let me

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well written! The words you write are very true! God's power can easily overcome the devil! Great write:0

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

My fellow friend, this is some good stuff, very greedy and dark. This can easily be material for a black metal project (black metal doesnt always intend to relate to evil) Even if you are a "Satanist" Satanism is not devil worshiping, in fact everything thats against Christian beliefs is Satanism.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good, yet a little insulting when it comes to my religion, but that's my problem, so no sweat. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

really good as always ^__^

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very dark and sinister, just like something Satan would do and be. Very interesting tale in your poem. Excellent horror write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is deep. I haven't been on here for a while and coming back to read this is a huge refresher. You've inspired me! I can't wait to get writing again!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Usually I can't stand poems with the AABB rhyme scheme, but this one was actually quite good! The story was interesting. The "devil" is such an interesting concept. Nice write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

haven't gotten a poem like this from you in a while. This is refreshing. I like the beat I hear in my head while reading it. Nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blasphemous much?

Haha the Psalms part got my attention most. I've read through them and they are very interesting actually.

Anyways awesome sauce.

:O)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: whispers, from, below, satan, lucifer, evil, bad, deception, blade, killing, mask, hell, flames, fire, burn

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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